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Memorandum part.
Draft an interoffice memorandum to Miriam Hopkins, the Director of Human Resources:
A. Assume that you've received confirmation from Jeremy Dittmer for the date, time, and materials needed. The trainer he has assigned is Deb Walker (e-mail: Deb.Walker@blah blah etc.......
B.Outline the arrangements you've made, providing explanations as needed. Your goal is to assure her that you've covered all the details.
C. Invent any additional details as needed
REVISED:
BROADWORTH GENERAL HOSPITAL
Interoffice Memo
TO: Miriam Hopkins, Director of Human Resources
FROM: Shawna Parker, Administrative Assistant
DATE: March 22, 2012
SUBJECT: Sexual Harassment and unlawful discrimination in the workplace seminar
We have received confirmation from Jeremy Dittmer for our seminar to be held on September 14, 2012, at 10 am. Conference room 105 on the first floor has been reserved for 20 of our supervisors. Those attending this seminar are required to bring pens, pencils and notebooks to take notes during the session. The trainer selected for this seminar is Deb Walker, she will be allowed to enter the room at 9 am that day to set up before our supervisors arrive. Refreshments such as muffins, cookies, coffee, water, and juice have been scheduled to be delivered to our conference room by the hospital cafeteria at 11 am. All materials requested by Deb such as a projection machine, screen, tables and chairs will be set up the evening prior. Deb will be bringing her laptop, pamphlets, follow along booklets and help center contact lists the day of the seminar.
If you have any further questions or concerns please do not hesitate to contact me. You can also contact Deb walker directly by email at: Deb.Walker@ or by phone at 802-559-6315 ext: 2206.
Shawna Parker
SP
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