Get rid of all passive verbs.
Put a REAL thesis statement at the end.
Do NOT keep saying what you will do in the paper.
Here are some ideas/websites for writing a really good introduction, as well as writing a really good thesis statement:
Thesis statement: http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
Introduction: http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/intros.htm
memorandum help. help to make this better readable for the viewer.
Purpose
Alternative fuels are becoming an important area of research. There are two main reasons researchers are looking for a new and reliable fuel source. The first is to combat the reliance of the U.S on foreign oil. The second is to reduce the amount of harmful emissions into the atmosphere. The heavy reliance on gasoline is harmful to both our economy and the environment. In this report I will discuss the best approaches in alternative fuel research. The three main approaches that will be covered are ethanol, the hydrogen fuel cell, and biodiesel. For each approach I will explain the process of producing the fuel, the benefits, costs, and the negative aspects. The information provided will show what the best alternative fuel will be.
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Warning: you are headed to being trite. Look that word up.
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