Melody has included redundant information in sentence 14.

Question

What is the MOST effective way to revise this sentence?
A.As students learn how to be good mentors, they focus on effective communication skills and become effective by sharing and listening.
B.As students learn how to be good mentors, they focus on effective communication skills, including how to share and how to listen.
C.As students learn how to be good mentors and have effective sharing and listening communication skills.
D.As students learn how to be good mentors, they focus on effective communication skills with sharing and listening.

18.  
What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 2?
A.Insert a comma after this.
B.Insert a comma after but.
C.Change this to these.
D.No change should be made in sentence 2.

19.  
What is the correct way to write sentence 23?
A.Our high school has an opportunity to allow it’s students to influence the future today and it should do so by starting a mentoring program
B.Our high school had an opportunity to allow its students to influence the future today and it should do so by starting a mentoring program.
C.Our high school has an opportunity, to allow its students to influence the future today and it should do so by starting a mentoring program.
D.Our high school has an opportunity to allow its students to influence the future today, and it should do so by starting a mentoring program.

20.  
What change needs to be made in sentence 8?
A.Her classroom is crowded and she can’t always get the one-on-one attention that she needs, to understand a new concept.
B. Her classroom is crowded, and she can’t always get the one-on-one attention that she needs to understand a new concept.
C.Her classroom is crowded; and she can’t always get the one-on-one attention that she needs to understand a new concept.
D.Her classroom is crowded and she can’t always get the one-on-one attention, that she needs to understand a new concept.

(1) They are continually telling us that we should become more involved in the community by volunteering our time. (2) After thinking about this I have a suggestion that would not only help high school students get involved but would also help elementary students in our district. (3) It would be helpful for our high school to start a mentoring program.

(4) Many of the students at our high school have excellent academic skills. (5) With a mentoring program, these students could put their skills to use by helping younger students who are struggling academically. (6) My own sister attends one of the elementary schools that feeds into our high school. (7) She is having a hard time in math. (8) Her classroom is crowded and she can’t always get the one-on-one attention that she needs to understand a new concept. (9) She has told me that she has many friends who also need help. (10) A mentoring program in which high school students tutor elementary students could be the solution. (11) By using a mentoring program, struggling youngsters could get the individual
attention they need to master new concepts.

(12) According to an article published in the November 2005 Education World, elementary school students raised their reading levels significantly in a short period of time after being tutored by high school students. (13) Furthermore, volunteering seems to have a positive influence on the high school mentors themselves. (14) As students learn how to be good mentors, they focus on effective communication skills, including how to communicate with others by sharing and listening. (15) Generally speaking, these skills are valuable for everyone. (16) Additionally, mentors get the satisfaction of meaningfully contributing to their community and future generations. (17) What student, at any age, wouldn’t be proud to have that kind of influence?

(18) Because mentoring programs have proven to be so successful, they now exist in schools around the country. (19) Some schools pair high school students with elementary students to practice computer skills, to play sports, to learn to play a musical instrument, or to discover how to be a good citizen. (20) I propose that our school begin by setting up a program that focuses on academic tutoring. (21) Fortunately, starting the program would require only a few students available and willing to help others. (22) I believe that many students would volunteer to be mentors, which would help children at all age levels in our school district. (23) Our high school has an opportunity to allow its students to influence the future today and it should do so by starting a mentoring program.

GPT-4o mini · Answer

Here are the most effective revisions for each of the sentences you provided:

14. What is the MOST effective way to revise this sentence?
B. As students learn how to be good mentors, they focus on effective communication skills, including how to share and how to listen.
(This option removes redundancy while retaining clarity.)

18. What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 2?
D. No change should be made in sentence 2.
(The sentence is grammatically correct as it stands.)

19. What is the correct way to write sentence 23?
D. Our high school has an opportunity to allow its students to influence the future today, and it should do so by starting a mentoring program.
(This option adds a necessary comma before "and" to improve clarity.)

20. What change needs to be made in sentence 8?
B. Her classroom is crowded, and she can’t always get the one-on-one attention that she needs to understand a new concept.
(This revision corrects the run-on sentence by adding a comma before "and.")