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Holden Caulfield in “Catcher in the Rye”, seems to be obsessed with mortality and youthful innocence, both of which are embodied in James Castle and Allie Caulfield. Holden demonstrates these infatuations in his conversation with Phoebe.
At first, Phoebe is asking Holden to name at least one thing that he likes. Holden just can’t seem to focus, as what immediately comes to mind is this boy “[he] used to know at Elkton hills” who had stood up for himself, in the face of bullies, even though he was a “skinny, weak-looking guy”. This boy, James Castle, had been bullied to the point of “jump[ing] out the window”. Although Holden skips over the details of what these bullies did to him since they are “too repulsive”, he seems to languish in sharing the even more gruesome details of James’ death, “his teeth, and blood were all over the place”. The imagery with which Holden describes this scene, suggests that he has thought about this death many times. He doesn’t sound shocked though, he makes James Castle’s death seem almost noble, “instead of taking back what [James] said, he jumped”. Holden sounds as if he himself has contemplated the idea of suicide, James’ being so simple. It reinforces the idea that Holden is trying to save his own innocence, and in a way, James’ innocence was saved through the fact that he no longer was going to risk that chance of becoming a phony. Holden continues to draw connections between himself and James Castle, recalling that “[James] had on this turtleneck sweater that [Holden] had lent him” and how “ [James’] name was right ahead of [his] at roll call”. He alludes to seeing a resemblance of perfection in death, as it fulfills Holden’s love for unchanging things, and his belief that youthful innocence is the epitome of perfection.
In the next section, after Holden realizes that Phoebe has been speaking to him, Phoebe proclaims that “[Holden] can’t even think of one thing [that he likes”. Holden, his mind still seeming to be on James, asserts that “[He] like[s] Allie”. Phoebe, exasperated, snaps at him that “if somebody’s dead and all, then [it doesn’t count]”. Holden appears to be the only one who can’t, or won’t, let go of Allie. Holden displays some of his own innocence in his child like anger, “ Just because somebody’s dead you don’t just stop liking them [...] especially if they were about a thousand times nicer than the people you know that are alive and all”. Holden’s inability to let go of a sibling’s death, is reminiscent of a child mourning the loss of their pet, refusing to let it be replaced, and refusing to let anyone else in, yet in so much pain. Holden’s own remaining innocence refuses to let him fully acknowledge Allie’s death.