Change "Due to" to "Because of"
Otherwise, it sounds fine.
'Look around your community's sidewalks, streets, transportation system, and public buildings. How easily can a person with a disability get around? Write a letter to the editor of your local newspaper expressing your views about what changes need to be made. Be sure not to use fallacies, and make your letter eloquent and firm, without being overexcited or pushy.'
Dear editor,
Our community is a very great one; the parks are excellent, the library is a great place to study, and the streets always clean, but there is one problem that has come to my attention. People with disabilities may have problems going around some places. Due to some physical barriers, some people with mobility impairments may have to rely on others to assist them when transacting their business, or they may not participate in activities in which they would otherwise be interested. Objects such as pay telephones and drinking fountains can cause injury to people who are blind or who have low vision if the objects protrude into walkways and are positioned so someone using a cane cannot detect them. Some problems with parking spaces are that there are no access aisles, or access aisles are too narrow. There are also built-up curb ramps in access aisles. There are no signs, or signs are placed so parked vehicles can obstruct them and parking garages do not have adequate vertical clearance for vans. Some ramps are too steep or go too long without level rest areas; handrails are not provided on both sides. If you work on fixing these problems, everyone in the community will enjoy activities no matter what their disability. Thank you for taking time to read my suggestions.
Sincerely,
A Member Of Your Community
Is this alright?
Thanks
-MC
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OK, Thank you!
-MC
-MC
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