Option 4, “Add ‘of warm pumpkin and spices’ after ‘smell’,” would help the paragraph use more sensory language. This addition provides a vivid description that engages the reader's sense of smell, enhancing the imagery of the scene.
Layla waited to put the muffins in the oven. She know as soon as they went in, the smell would let the cat out of the bag. She never managed to surprise her sister with breakfast on her birthday. Mai always woke up first- or, even if she didn't, caught Layla mid-cook.
Which revision would help the paragraph use more sensory language?
1. Add "impatiently" after "waited"
2. Add "red-handed" after "caught" Layla".
3. Add "hot" before "oven".
4. Add "of warm pumpkin and spieces" after "smell".
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