Kyle heard a sound on the first floor of his grandmother's old house, so he walked down the creaky stairs to investigate.

Question

Read the passage so it uses figurative language to improve the description of the setting in this passage.

a. Kyle heard a loud clinking sound on the first floor of his grandmother's old house, so he crept quietly down the creaky stairs to investigate
b. Kyle heard a sound, so loud he could hardly believe it, on the first floor of his grandmother's old house, so he walked down the creaky stairs to investigate
c. Kyle heard a sound like chimes clinking on the first floor of the ancient ruin of his grandmother's house, so he walked down the creaky stair to investigate
d. Kyle heard a sound on the first floor of his grandmother's crumbling house, so he tiptoes down the creaky stairs to investigate

Answer 1

To enhance the setting with figurative language and vivid descriptions, option c provides the most evocative imagery. It compares the sound to "chimes clinking" and refers to the house as an "ancient ruin," which adds a layer of character and history to the setting. Here's a revised version of option c for even more descriptive flair:

Kyle heard a sound like chimes clinking gently in the stillness on the first floor of the ancient ruin of his grandmother's house, so he tiptoed down the creaky stairs, each step echoing memories of a bygone era, to investigate.

This revision not only maintains the figurative language but also intensifies the atmosphere associated with the house and the sound Kyle hears.