Asked by Ann

Is this sentence grammatically correct?

''Everyone has a need to feel accepted and being cared about and it is family and friends that play a vital role in individual’s lifestyle choices.''
Answered by Writeacher
It's a compound-complex sentence, and it needs one comma added. Can you see where?

http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/sentences.htm#sentence_types

"...has a need to feel accepted and being cared about..."
This part needs to have parallel form. How will you fix it?
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/parallelism.htm
Answered by Ann
would that be better: Everyone has a need to feel being accepted and cared about, and it is family and friends that play a vital role in individual’s lifestyle choices
Answered by Ms. Sue
It would be best to eliminate "being." Substitute "who" for "that."
Answered by Writeacher
Almost perfect!

Remove "being" in the first clause, and add "an" before "individual" in the second clause. Then everything will be fine.
Answered by Ann
so it would be this way: Everyone has a need to feel accepted and cared about, and it is family and friends that play a vital role in an individual’s lifestyle choices
Answered by Writeacher
Yes.
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