I like it.
You may want to set it aside for a few hours or over night and then see if you want to add to it.
Is this a good way to describe silence outside the school gates?
silence arose at the school gates. Every so often cars pass by disturbing the peace. The sound that was made was the part time teachers escaping before the chaos and the sound of the wind, whispering rumours.
it doesn't sound that interesting. I need to add more metaphors and personification.
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Its my homework to finish the opening scene