It's pretty weak. How many people do you know who would agree with this statement? Probably almost everyone, right? Then it's not much of a thesis statement.
Your thesis statement must include factual information plus your position/opinion/stance. Without your position on the topic, it isn't a true thesis statement. So think of this sentence as the angle you want to take on the topic and what you intend to prove by the end of your paper. (If your statement is simply factual, then there's nothing to prove!)
http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
This is one of the very best places I've seen online to help students write good thesis statements. It shows you sentences that aren't thesis statements and how to turn each one into real thesis statements.
is this a good thesis statement for a paper about Dave Grohl from the Foo Fighters. In my paper i want to include the work he put into his career, controversy after Kurt Cobain's death and success of the foo fighters. this is what i have so far:
Although there were many obstacles in his road to fame, Dave Grohl will go down as a legend in the history of rock.
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Yeah do it man