Introduction 1
Our school is having a canned goods drive. Together with the local Kiwanis Club, our Sustainability Club is organizing the drive. They want to collect 2,000 cans in the next month. There are several ways that students can help.
Introduction 2
Did you know that 250 families in our town rely on the local Food Pantry for at least one meal a day? The Sustainability Club wants to help, and you can help, too. The club is holding a canned goods drive with a surprisingly challenging goal.
critique both introductions by explaining which you believe is better and why.
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In my opinion, Introduction 1 is better because it provides clear and concise information about the canned goods drive and the organizations involved. It states the goal of collecting 2,000 cans in a month, which gives readers a specific target to work towards. Additionally, it mentions the partnership with the local Kiwanis Club, which may help to inspire more students to participate. On the other hand, Introduction 2 starts with a statistic about the number of families relying on the local Food Pantry without immediately connecting it to the canned goods drive. It also describes the goal as "surprisingly challenging" without providing any specific details. Therefore, Introduction 1 is more effective in engaging readers and conveying the purpose of the canned goods drive.
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