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. A deep pale breath from his mouth, surrounded group of people that were forced to serve in their mother land was conscripted at a young age.
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The air was frigid and still as they stood in formation. The sound of boots shifting on packed snow filled the silence that weighed on them heavily. And then it came. Like a ghostly apparition, a deep, pale breath escaped Jack's mouth. It lingered in the air, reminding them all of the cruel hand that had conscripted them into service for their motherland. They were all so young when they were forced into this life, and now they stood here, uncertain of what lies ahead.