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The factors about this stage that might be impacting his perspective of this situation will be stability; like having a family that he had but dissolved by the divorce or creating a positive change that everyone could benefit.
This is a very awkward sentence. First, you say that "the factors . . . will be stability." Stability is only one factor. Where are the others?
You should really divide this into two or three sentences. Please rewrite this sentence.
At this stage, he just got divorce, fighting for joint custody and trying to start over again.
You need parallel construction here.
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Michael should be aware that success brings feelings of usefulness and accomplishment, while failure results in unsuccessful involvement.
How does it help Michael to tell him that failure results in unsuccessful involvement? Shouldn't you be helping him achieve success?
If he is successful during this phase, he will experience many regrets for not being able to see his kids everyday but as often as possible.
Please reread this sentence carefully. I don't think it says what you mean to say.
In what stage of development is Michael and what factors about this stage might be impacting his perspective of this situation?
Michael is at the middle adulthood stage where he needs to establish or take care of things
that will outlast him. The factors about this stage that might be impacting his perspective of this
situation will be stability; like having a family that he had but dissolved by the divorce or
creating a positive change that everyone could benefit. At this stage, he just got divorce, fighting
for joint custody and trying to start over again. Michael should be aware that success brings
feelings of usefulness and accomplishment, while failure results in unsuccessful involvement.
He would be experiencing conflict that could serve him as a turning point in development. As a
result, potential for personal growth is high, so is potential for failure. Also, in this stage,
Michael will have to continue building his life, get the necessary help and focus on the future. If
he is successful during this phase, he will experience many regrets for not being able to see his
kids everyday but as often as possible. Therefore, he will look forward to better things and have
a general sense of satisfaction.
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