Imagine what the clerk is really thinking. He's obviously disdainful of these cheaply clad girls who are treating him like dirt. He knows they don't even come close to affording the necklace.
Now -- write a monologue showing what you believe he's thinking.
In "Standard of Living", little is said about the store clerk or his thoughts about Annabel and Midge. His character is briefly described through his actions and the character in which he speaks to the girls. As well, "his neat face showed no astonishment at their appearance" suggests he has opinions about the girls that he does not reveal.
Use first-person narrative point of view to capture the shop clerk's perspective. Rewrite the scene in which Annabel and Midge enter the shop, beginning with "They tendered thanks, icily, to the doorman for ushering them into the shop" and ending when they leave the shop. The clerk's character should remain consistent with the manner in which he is portrayed in the story. His opinion of the girls and the event must be presented.
Help would be greatly appreciated :)
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