Question

In free-writing form, discuss your learning style and what kind of learner you are.

can someone proof read this for me?

I am a kinesthetic learner; I like to do hands on work like labs. I do best in a classroom where there is lots of movement; where I can do it myself. I prefer group work rather than single activity. I recall everything I did in the group, but forget what I did by myself. I enjoy being on the computer, and excel in sports like basketball, and soccer. When I talk I use my hands a lot. I sometimes find it difficult to stay in one place for a long period of time; I need to get up and move. I like teachers who encourage in-class demonstrations, hand-on learning experiences and field work outside the classroom. I learn best by discussing new subjects; if I read it I will go through one ear and out the other, by listening I become distracted I usually tune it out. The best way I have learned over the years for me to study is to do hands on work. As well I have other techniques that have helped me study they are; visual study tools such as flash cards, play sort of like a game, write all information down several times, take notes on textbook readings and lectures, type information to be learned and talk aloud.


I am a kinesthetic learner; I like to do hands on<b><~~hyphenate (hands-on)</b> work like<b><~~incorrect use of "like" -- use "such as" instead.</b> labs. I do best in a classroom where there is lots<b><~~delete "lots" and insert "a great deal" -- for subject/verb agreement</b> of movement;<b><~~incorrect use of semicolon -- delete it and insert a comma</b> where I can do it<b><~~what is "it"?</b> myself. I prefer group work rather than single activity. I recall everything I did<b><~~past tense is jerky -- what did you do and when? Maybe it's better to write, "I can recall everything I do in groups, but ... "</b> in the group, but forget what I did by myself.<b><~~change verb tenses to match whatever you changed in the first part of the sentence</b> I enjoy being on<b><~~delete "being on" (you're not really ON it, I hope!) and insert "using"</b> the computer,<b><~~delete comma</b> and excel in sports like<b><~~"like" again??</b> basketball, and soccer. When I talk<b><~~insert comma</b> I use my hands a lot<b><~~find a better word/phrase to use other than "a lot" -- consider that little phrase a dead word</b>. I sometimes find it difficult to stay in one place for a long period of time; I need to get up and move. I like teachers who encourage in-class demonstrations, hand-on<b><~~hand<u>s</u>-on</b> learning experiences and field work outside the classroom. I learn best by discussing new subjects; if I read it<b><~~what is "it"? also, a comma needs to be there</b> I<b><~~YOU will go through one ear... ??</b> will go through one ear and out the other,<b><~~comma splice; make two sentences here)</b> by listening I become distracted<b><~~run-on; make two sentences here</b> I usually tune it<b><~~"it"???</b> out. The best way I have learned over the years for me to study is to do hands on<b><~~hyphenate (hands-on)</b> work. As well<b><~~awkward; delete "As well"</b> I have other techniques that have helped me study<b><~~run-on</b> they are;<b><~~delete semicolon; no punctuation needed</b> visual study tools such as flash cards, play sort of like a game, write all information down several times, take notes on textbook readings and lectures, type information to be learned<b><~~add comma</b> and talk aloud. <b><~~You end with a nice series, except that the first element of the series doesn't match the others. Here are the main parts of your series:
visual study tools (noun)
play (verb)
write (verb)
take (verb)
type (verb)
talk (verb)
Now you just need to change that first one to be phrased as a verb phrase, too. That's known as parallel construction: http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/parallelism.htm

Here are some other webpages that should help:
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/runons.htm

http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/plague.htm

http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/grammar/g_pronuse.html
See #3.

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I honestly want to thank you so much Writeacher!
you are the best!


You're very welcome!!

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