In free-writing form, discuss your learning style and what kind of learner you are.
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I am a kinesthetic learner; I like to do hands on work like labs. I do best in a classroom where there is lots of movement; where I can do it myself. I prefer group work rather than single activity. I recall everything I did in the group, but forget what I did by myself. I enjoy being on the computer, and excel in sports like basketball, and soccer. When I talk I use my hands a lot. I sometimes find it difficult to stay in one place for a long period of time; I need to get up and move. I like teachers who encourage in-class demonstrations, hand-on learning experiences and field work outside the classroom. I learn best by discussing new subjects; if I read it I will go through one ear and out the other, by listening I become distracted I usually tune it out. The best way I have learned over the years for me to study is to do hands on work. As well I have other techniques that have helped me study they are; visual study tools such as flash cards, play sort of like a game, write all information down several times, take notes on textbook readings and lectures, type information to be learned and talk aloud.
I am a kinesthetic learner; I like to do hands on<~~hyphenate (hands-on) work like<~~incorrect use of "like" -- use "such as" instead. labs. I do best in a classroom where there is lots<~~delete "lots" and insert "a great deal" -- for subject/verb agreement of movement;<~~incorrect use of semicolon -- delete it and insert a comma where I can do it<~~what is "it"? myself. I prefer group work rather than single activity. I recall everything I did<~~past tense is jerky -- what did you do and when? Maybe it's better to write, "I can recall everything I do in groups, but ... " in the group, but forget what I did by myself.<~~change verb tenses to match whatever you changed in the first part of the sentence I enjoy being on<~~delete "being on" (you're not really ON it, I hope!) and insert "using" the computer,<~~delete comma and excel in sports like<~~"like" again?? basketball, and soccer. When I talk<~~insert comma I use my hands a lot<~~find a better word/phrase to use other than "a lot" -- consider that little phrase a dead word. I sometimes find it difficult to stay in one place for a long period of time; I need to get up and move. I like teachers who encourage in-class demonstrations, hand-on<~~hands-on learning experiences and field work outside the classroom. I learn best by discussing new subjects; if I read it<~~what is "it"? also, a comma needs to be there I<~~YOU will go through one ear... ?? will go through one ear and out the other,<~~comma splice; make two sentences here) by listening I become distracted<~~run-on; make two sentences here I usually tune it<~~"it"??? out. The best way I have learned over the years for me to study is to do hands on<~~hyphenate (hands-on) work. As well<~~awkward; delete "As well" I have other techniques that have helped me study<~~run-on they are;<~~delete semicolon; no punctuation needed visual study tools such as flash cards, play sort of like a game, write all information down several times, take notes on textbook readings and lectures, type information to be learned<~~add comma and talk aloud. <~~You end with a nice series, except that the first element of the series doesn't match the others. Here are the main parts of your series:
visual study tools (noun)
play (verb)
write (verb)
take (verb)
type (verb)
talk (verb)
Now you just need to change that first one to be phrased as a verb phrase, too. That's known as parallel construction: http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/parallelism.htm
Here are some other webpages that should help:
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/runons.htm
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/plague.htm
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/grammar/g_pronuse.html
See #3.
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