Yes.
"Despite my eagerness" doesn't belong with "I was excited."
You could insert "though" after "excited."
I'm writing an essay and was wondering if this part was okay.
I was eager for this day to end and summer begin. Despite my eagerness, I was excited about the “surprise” guest the school had booked to make this day special for our graduating class.
Should I just say simplify it and say "I was excited.."
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Ok, thanks so much Ms. Sue!
I'm sorry to bother again but would this work?
Despite my eagerness for the day to end, I was excited about the “surprise” guest the school had booked to make this day special for our graduating class.
Despite my eagerness for the day to end, I was excited about the “surprise” guest the school had booked to make this day special for our graduating class.
Yes. That's very good!
Ah Yay! Thank you (:
You're welcome. :-)