It would read much more smoothly if you deleted the entire first paragraph. There is no need to write all that because it becomes obvious in the rest of your paper.
The rest is fine.
I wrote a report about giving advice to eat a good place.
Introduction
The aim of this report is to describe the best places to eat cheaply in my area and I explain why I choose them, in addition to the reasons of the cost. I believe the students will adore eating in these places.
Places to eat cheaply
The food variety in Peru is very diverse. In my town there are many restaurants to suit all tastes such as traditional food, Chinese food, Italian but the most popular and affordable for Peruvian people is the roasted chicken. In addition, the price will depend of the kind of restaurant, however, much of them are reasonable.
Secondly, my town is located close to the river bank so I recommend you the sea restaurants because the atmosphere is pleasant and the people very friendly. Your students can enjoy the beach and eat very well. For me the best restaurant is CABO because the food is delicious and healthy. Also the prices are low and the portions are generous.
Conclusion
To sum up, my town offers plenty of places to eat cheaply. If you want to taste healthy food and delicious I think the sea restaurants are the best place for your students.
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You are a little bit more "wordy" than you need to be. Also, you need to review your use of commas.
http://www.grammarbook.com/punctuation/commas.asp
Introduction
This report describes the best places to eat cheaply in my area, and I explain why I choose them in addition to the cost. I believe students will adore eating in these places.
Places to eat cheaply
The food variety in Peru is very diverse. In my town, there are many restaurants that suit all tastes — such as traditional food, Chinese food, Italian, but the most popular and affordable for Peruvian people is roasted chicken. The price will depend of the kind of restaurant, however, most (refers to separate units rather than the amount of one category) of the restaurants are reasonable.
My town is located close to the river bank, so I recommend the sea restaurants. The atmosphere is pleasant, and the people very friendly. Students can enjoy the beach and eat very well. For me, the best restaurant is CABO (Is that the name or the abbreviation? If abbreviation, spell out.), because the food is delicious and healthy. Also the prices are low, and the portions are generous.
Conclusion
To sum up, my town offers plenty of places to eat cheaply. If you want to taste food that is healthy and delicious, I think the sea restaurants are the best place for students.
(I hope this helps.)
http://www.grammarbook.com/punctuation/commas.asp
Introduction
This report describes the best places to eat cheaply in my area, and I explain why I choose them in addition to the cost. I believe students will adore eating in these places.
Places to eat cheaply
The food variety in Peru is very diverse. In my town, there are many restaurants that suit all tastes — such as traditional food, Chinese food, Italian, but the most popular and affordable for Peruvian people is roasted chicken. The price will depend of the kind of restaurant, however, most (refers to separate units rather than the amount of one category) of the restaurants are reasonable.
My town is located close to the river bank, so I recommend the sea restaurants. The atmosphere is pleasant, and the people very friendly. Students can enjoy the beach and eat very well. For me, the best restaurant is CABO (Is that the name or the abbreviation? If abbreviation, spell out.), because the food is delicious and healthy. Also the prices are low, and the portions are generous.
Conclusion
To sum up, my town offers plenty of places to eat cheaply. If you want to taste food that is healthy and delicious, I think the sea restaurants are the best place for students.
(I hope this helps.)
thanks so much
You're welcome.
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