I tried writing the opening to my article on vegetarianism and this is what I got so far. [A lot of people like to sit down at night and eat a big, juicy steak – and then there are those who prefer an organic meal without any meat. Vegetarianism is not uncommon, but it’s not exactly popular.] I'm not sure what kind of lead this is - or why I'm having so much trouble with it. My first articles went so smoothly...
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Maybe I could just start with a question?
That's a weak lead.
If you post the rest of your article, I can help you with the lead.
If you post the rest of your article, I can help you with the lead.
Heh...I'm a fiction writer, not a journalist, so it's really hard for me ... The article isn't finished yet - it's barely even started. And it's still kind of choppy because I haven't really done much editing and reordering and stuff just yet.
[There are a variety of reasons as to why people convert to vegetarianism.
A vegetarian diet is proven to be healthier and can provide health benefits. It can give all the vitamins, fats, and minerals necessary for one’s health, while meat is not a crucial part of a healthy diet.
However, meat can give one all the essential nutrients in a single serving, something that most vegetarian foods cannot do. This makes meat a much more convenient source for such things as protein and vitamins.
Many simply find it cruel to kill animals for food, as it has been proven that they can feel fear and pain when being slaughtered.
Tally ------, vegetarian for seven months, said, “I looked stuff up on YouTube and I just saw a bunch of animals being abused.”
While it’s true that there are some meat industries that do not go through with inhumane slaughters, many of them do.
“I don’t like people who do abuse the animals, and I don’t really know which companies do and which companies don’t,” ------ said.]
[There are a variety of reasons as to why people convert to vegetarianism.
A vegetarian diet is proven to be healthier and can provide health benefits. It can give all the vitamins, fats, and minerals necessary for one’s health, while meat is not a crucial part of a healthy diet.
However, meat can give one all the essential nutrients in a single serving, something that most vegetarian foods cannot do. This makes meat a much more convenient source for such things as protein and vitamins.
Many simply find it cruel to kill animals for food, as it has been proven that they can feel fear and pain when being slaughtered.
Tally ------, vegetarian for seven months, said, “I looked stuff up on YouTube and I just saw a bunch of animals being abused.”
While it’s true that there are some meat industries that do not go through with inhumane slaughters, many of them do.
“I don’t like people who do abuse the animals, and I don’t really know which companies do and which companies don’t,” ------ said.]
How about this sentence as your lead?
A vegetarian diet has been proven to be healthier than a diet with meat.
A vegetarian diet has been proven to be healthier than a diet with meat.
Hmmm....That one would be okay, I suppose. Might attract more people. Thanks!
The purpose of a journalistic lead is to summarize the news article. It also serves to entice the reader to keep on reading.
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