1) Sleep knits up the "ravelled sleave" of care. Shakespeare uses this metaphor to stress the fact that it is sleep which removes our cares. <~~This is fine.
Sleep comes at the end of each day, it happens in darkness, it is like a little death. <~~There are run-ons here -- sentences run together without correct punctuation. How will you fix it?
2) "Sore labour's bath" means that sleep brings relief to bodies aching from hard work as do baths. The body has a chance to relax and recover from injury. <~~This is fine.
3) "Balm of hurt minds" relates to the same thing<~~Add comma. but mentally. Sleep refreshes the mind as is<~~delete "is" does the body.
4) The final section relates to the fact that without sleep, we would die. It nourishes us and gives us life and energy as does the second (and more important) course at a meal. It is essential and life giving. <~~This is fine.
I tried to rephrase these lines from S's Macbeth, again. Could you please have a look at them and help me with them?
1) Macbeth: "Methought I heard a voice cry, “Sleep no more! Macbeth does murder sleep”—the innocent sleep,Sleep that knits up the raveled sleave of care,The death of each day’s life, sore labor’s bath,Balm of hurt minds, great nature’s second course,Chief nourisher in life’s feast."
1) Sleep knits up the "ravelled sleave" of care. Shakespeare uses this metaphor to stress the fact that it is sleep which removes our cares.
Sleep comes at the end of each day, it happens in darkness, it is like a little death.
2) "Sore labour's bath" means that sleep brings relief to bodies aching from hard work as do baths. The body has a chance to relax and recover from injury.
3) "Balm of hurt minds" relates to the same thing but mentally. Sleep refreshes the mind as is does the body.
4) The final section relates to the fact that without sleep, we would die. It nourishes us and gives us life and energy as does the second (and more important) course at a meal. It is essential and life giving.
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Sleep refreshes the mind as it does the body.