Your paragraph looks good.
Go back to your textbook and you may find more details to add.
I posted this yesterday, but I don't think any one noticed.
Imagine you are a delegate to the Estates General. Explain why YOU, as a representative of one of the Estates, will ot will not cooperate with the king. P.S the king I'm talking about is Louis XVI.
I am going to imagine that I am a peasant, one of the lower classes.
--- As a representative, I will not cooperate with the king because he does not make decisions that apply good for everyone. He doesn't try to understand the poor's problems at all. It is always us who have to pay our taxes twice as much as the higher class. Because of him others have died of starvation. The king does not care
for anyone other than himself. If he really did care then instead of spending his money abundantly, he would donate it to us, the poor.
please add more, I would like just a few more sentences, thanks. Also if some sentences in my Paragraph do not make sense, then please change them around.
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As a representative, I will not cooperate with the king because he does not make decisions that apply good for everyone. He doesn't try to understand the poor's problems at all. From our perspective the king can never become god. As days pass, our loyalty for him decreases. How can someone like him be given the power to rule? It is the mighty who shall rule. If the king was fair then he wouldn't have picked on us to pay our taxes twice as much as the higher class. Because of him others have died of starvation. The king does not care
for anyone other than himself. If he really did care then instead of spending his money abundantly, he would donate it to us, the poor. What do we have? Nothing is the answer, our only hope was the king, but now that is pointless as well. Us peasants can only pray to the almighty for everyones good. Also, no one can change the fact that whatever destiny has instore for you will happen; soon we may be in the king's position, and the king may be in ours.
I have added more, but some sentences in this paragraph are kind of messed up, so if you can change them, I would be really thankful, thanks.
for anyone other than himself. If he really did care then instead of spending his money abundantly, he would donate it to us, the poor. What do we have? Nothing is the answer, our only hope was the king, but now that is pointless as well. Us peasants can only pray to the almighty for everyones good. Also, no one can change the fact that whatever destiny has instore for you will happen; soon we may be in the king's position, and the king may be in ours.
I have added more, but some sentences in this paragraph are kind of messed up, so if you can change them, I would be really thankful, thanks.
Aside from a couple of grammatical mistakes that would be understandable in a poor, illiterate peasant, your paragraph is very good.
thank you
You're welcome.
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