The recurring problem I see in here is the use of verbs. I know they're not easy, but keep working on them.
1. I learned that soil has a crucial role in growing plants. If the soil is healthy, any plant will grow well there. The plant will be of better quality, better flavor, and better nutritional values.
2. OK
3. Farmers and ranchers are competitively trying to reduce their costs in many ways. One common strategy they use is to increase the scale of their (delete "mass") operation. (delete extra words) This strategy can bring about quality control issues resulting in food problems. Every year, there are 5,200 people in America who die from E. coli bacteria and salmonella.
i need proof reading with my work if i did any mistake. thanks
1. I learned that soil take crucial role in growing plants. If the soil is healthy, any plant will grew well on that soil. The plant will have a better quality, better flavor, and better nutritional values.
2. People buy food that is cheap and convenient. In the market, there are instant meals that do not require any cooking energy and can be eaten anytime. The downside of these instant meal products is that these products contain high fat and high fructose corn syrup which is the major cause of national obesity epidemic.
3. Farmers and ranchers are competitively trying to reduce their cost in many ways. One common strategy they use is they increase the scale of their mass operation by operating their mass scale of production. This strategy brings about quality control issues resulting food problems. Every year, there are 5,200 people in America that died from E. coli bacteria and salmonella.
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