I need a little help..I have to find a good argumentative thesis statement. My goal is to prove that cyber-bullying is worse than regular bullying. I have tried several different times to come up with a good statement that is argumentative but to no avail the instructor keeps kicking it back...Would someone please lend me a hand and help me?? I would appreciate it more than you know...

Answer 1

I personally would like to see what you did before.

http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/545/01/

The issue that will be difficult for you is proving the "worse" part, and what "regular" bullying is. Goodness, that is as silly what some of our laws do on murder, classifying murder by degrees, in the end, murder is murder.

So I would kick back your thesis unless you narrowed with meaningful terms what "worse" and "regular" means. Frankly, I would abandon those terms, or define them. Consider this (I am rephrasing your sentence): My goal is to prove that computer fraud is worse than regular fraud.

Now do you see what I am saying? Your terms make the entire thesis ill-defined, and certainly not provable.

Answer 2

Hi bobpursley...thanks for your response...here are a couple of the ones that I did that the instructor kicked back. My thesis statement is suppose to be persuasive and arugementative and I am just not getting there. When I said about that my goal is to prove that cyber-bullying is worse than regular or traditional bullying that was not my thesis statement. That is just the topic I am writing about and that was an opinion that the instructor narrowed me down to. Here are the statements I have had:

1. There are a large number of parents and youth who feel that cyber-bullying is not a big enough problem to report to the proper authorities. However, it has been proven that cyber-bullying can be a leading cause of serious disorders including suicide.

2. Exposure to online victimization is one of the major occurrences facing youth today.

Answer 3

Cyber-bullying may cause the victim more emotional distress than other types of bullying.