TRIP TO SAN DIEGO
My family and I and 3 families went to San Diego for Winter Break. We drove 8 hours, we had to stay in Hotel in Las Vegas, Nevada for the night. The next morning we ate breakfast and continued driving to San Diego. It took us 5 hours to arrive in San Diego California. We drove to our hotel. All the families unpacked clothes and things, and changed. The boys went swimming to the pool, while the girls gathered together at my mom’s friends hotel room, we ate food and talked.
The next day, at the afternoon All the families went to meet my cousins for first time. We arrived at their place, the boys went places. While the women and girls stayed at my cousins house. Me and some other children talked with my cousin. While the mom’s talked with my cousin’s mom. My cousin had 3 sisters, including her 4, and 1 brother. We had fun with talking to my cousins. It became night time and (let’s name her) May asked if I can sleepover, I didn’t want to but my mom said ,”get to know her to know ur cousin bit more better at least”, so I said “ok”. So I stayed with my May and her sisters; while my mom and other families went back to the hotel. After few minutes, there was a knock on the door, I opened and it was one of the children, she said: I want to stay here too because I’ll be bored without Zuhra. Me and my friend helped them clean up the table. Her mom said: my friend (let’s name her Emma) Emma and I and May have to sleep early, because we had to go to sea world with our families and the other 2 families.
I’ve that so far I need 3 more long paragraphs
I need a essay one page essay on: A trip to san Diego
The description has to be a trip to san Diego and meeting cousins for the first time, and going to sea world and going to the beach with 3 other families. Winter break vacation trip with 3 other families.
It has to have 4000 words.
A essay, please about UR a trip to San Diego and pretend ur meeting ur cousins for the first time, and u go to sea world.
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Uh...there was this person named Jiskha Homework help with a similar question. He/She changed their name to help, is this the same person?I will still help. I will correct and edit your paper.
TRIP TO SAN DIEGO (You could make your title shorter and snappier)
My family and I and 3 (other) families went to San Diego for (a) Winter Break. We drove 8 hours, we had to stay in hotel in Las Vegas, Nevada for the night. The next morning we ate breakfast and continued driving to San Diego. It took us 5 hours to arrive in San Diego, California. We drove to our hotel (you could make this sentence longer). All (of) the families unpacked clothes and changed. The boys went swimming to the pool, while the girls gathered together at my mom’s friends (if it's singular do friend's, but if it's plural do friends') hotel room, we ate food and talked.
The next day, at the afternoon (You need to put correct punctuation) All (of) the families went to meet my cousins for first time. We arrived at their place, (and) the boys went places. While (different word maybe?) the women and girls stayed at my cousins (multiple or singular? If multiple then it is cousins', but if it is singular then do cousin's) house. Me (don't start a sentence with Me) and some other children talked with my cousin. While the mom’s (you don't need an apostrophe there) talked with my cousin’s mom. My cousin has 3 sisters, including her 4 (4 what?), and 1 brother. We had fun with talking to my cousins. It became night time and (let’s name her) May asked if I can sleepover.
I didn’t want to, but my mom said,"Get to know her to know your cousin a bit better at least," so I said (choose a different word than said please) “Okay." So I stayed with May and her sisters; while my mom and the other families went back to the hotel. After few minutes, there was a knock on the door, I opened and it was one of the children.
She said, "I want to stay here too because I’ll be bored without Zuhra. Me and my friend (instead of me and my friend, do My friend and I) helped them clean up the table.
Her mom said, "My friend (let’s name her Emma) Emma, May and I have to sleep early, because we had to go to Sea World with our families and the other 2 families.
Good so far. I made a few changes and gave some advice in some places.
My family and I and 3 (other) families went to San Diego for (a) Winter Break. We drove 8 hours, we had to stay in hotel in Las Vegas, Nevada for the night. The next morning we ate breakfast and continued driving to San Diego. It took us 5 hours to arrive in San Diego, California. We drove to our hotel (you could make this sentence longer). All (of) the families unpacked clothes and changed. The boys went swimming to the pool, while the girls gathered together at my mom’s friends (if it's singular do friend's, but if it's plural do friends') hotel room, we ate food and talked.
The next day, at the afternoon (You need to put correct punctuation) All (of) the families went to meet my cousins for first time. We arrived at their place, (and) the boys went places. While (different word maybe?) the women and girls stayed at my cousins (multiple or singular? If multiple then it is cousins', but if it is singular then do cousin's) house. Me (don't start a sentence with Me) and some other children talked with my cousin. While the mom’s (you don't need an apostrophe there) talked with my cousin’s mom. My cousin has 3 sisters, including her 4 (4 what?), and 1 brother. We had fun with talking to my cousins. It became night time and (let’s name her) May asked if I can sleepover.
I didn’t want to, but my mom said,"Get to know her to know your cousin a bit better at least," so I said (choose a different word than said please) “Okay." So I stayed with May and her sisters; while my mom and the other families went back to the hotel. After few minutes, there was a knock on the door, I opened and it was one of the children.
She said, "I want to stay here too because I’ll be bored without Zuhra. Me and my friend (instead of me and my friend, do My friend and I) helped them clean up the table.
Her mom said, "My friend (let’s name her Emma) Emma, May and I have to sleep early, because we had to go to Sea World with our families and the other 2 families.
Good so far. I made a few changes and gave some advice in some places.
@Barry Vacker. It’s the same person and thank you so much
Also wat other words than “said”?
You can say,
I didn't want to, but my mom said, "at least get to know your cousin". I sighed, "okay".
I didn't want to, but my mom said, "at least get to know your cousin". I sighed, "okay".
@Hammer Morty
Tend
Thnx