All looks good except for this sentence:
"A large home, a gardener, expensive furniture, the best clothes, and jewelry but it isn't enough to satisfy them enough to stop wasting all of the income from Richards' job on the expected position that motivates them which makes it very difficult to have much sympathy for the mother."
You're trying to set up a compound sentence, but the words up until "but" do not make an independent clause. After "but" the construction is OK except for two relative clauses in succession.
My best suggestion is that you revise this so that there are two complete sentences and get rid of either "that" or "which."
And finally, in your revision, be sure to clarify this: "...the income from Richards' job on the expected position..." How can they waste something they don't have yet??
PS -- If the name is "Richards," then the apostrophe is fine; if the name is "Richard," then the apostrophe needs to be before the "s."
I have to write a review of the short story The Rocking Horse Winner.
Is this good?
"A Boy With a Gift and Curse"
By Jon Blank
This is a story of a middle class English family that finds themselves in a situation that is far above what they can afford. A large home, a gardener, expensive furniture, the best clothes,
and jewelry but it isn't enough to satisfy them enough to stop wasting all of the income from Richards' job on the expected position that motivates them which makes it very difficult to
have much sympathy for the mother.
I find it very entertaining that D.H. Lawrence uses an inanimate object to symbolize a supernatural existance. He does so in a very sneaky way which I feel if you are a big fan of the
genre you will be begging for more.
The oldest child, Paul, bears witness to the misfortunes of his parents, but becomes determined to help his mother out of the dilemma that she ultimatley finds herself in, by being 'lucky.' During an afternoon walk with her, she has made an unknown, fatal decision to set in motion, a disturbing series of events that will culminate in tragedy, by the mere mention to Paul that his father is 'not lucky.' Determined to win the love and affection that is absent from the demeanor of his mother, the wheels begin to turn like gears grinding with outbursts and spurts before achieving their end result. I was never a huge fan of D.H. Lawrence but after I read this interesting tale I immediately fell in love with his writing style and the different themes he decides to incorporate into his work. I give this book an 8 out of 10 stars. You won't be disappointed.
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