Question

I have to write a 5 paragraph essay on being sent to a desert island.

Here is my thesis statement:

Whoever would have guessed that the reason Willie was taken out of such a bad environment woud end up teaching him a new way of survival?

How does this sound?

Answer 1

I am wondering exactly who is doing the teaching: Willie, or whomever?

Answer 2

Willie is stranded on an island alone.

Answer 3

A thesis statement introduces the reader to your paper. Check these sites for explanations of good thesis sentences.

http://www.unc.edu/depts/wcweb/handouts/thesis.html

http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/composition/thesis.htm

http://www.indiana.edu/~wts/pamphlets/thesis_statement.shtml

Answer 4

Lizzie, you missed my point: Your statement is totally confusing. Secondly, your thesis is not a statement, it is a question. Thesis statement have to be a statement, which can be argued (your points do that), for which evidence can be submitted.

See: http://www.unc.edu/depts/wcweb/handouts/thesis.html

Answer 5

Upon rereading your original question, I wonder if this is a story you are to write, or an essay. Essays need thesis statements, stories do not. But surely your teacher knows that...
If a story assignment, you need a story line, or a moral, or a point to be told...those are not thesis statements.