That reads like an introduction, not a thesis statement. How can you get this down to ONE sentence?
Read through the examples here and then work on your thesis sentence!
https://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
And rephrase so there's no "we" (or any other 1st or 2nd person pronoun) in your paper.
I have to write a 5 and a half page research paper and I decided for my topic to be Alexander the Great. Could someone read my thesis statement and tell me what they think? Thanks.
Alexander the Great is one of the most extraordinary and unforgettable figures in all of Greek history. Not only was he an ambitious leader, who successfully conquered many lands, but even after his unforeseen death, his everlasting effect of spreading the Greek culture sustained. In this essay we will be focusing on many of Alexander's greatest triumphs, within and after his time on earth.
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I think I understand now. How's this: How the restless Alexander was able to triumph over so many, without losing a single battle, and spread the Greek culture while doing so.
Much better. Since it needs to be a complete sentence, though, you should just omit the first word and alter a bit in the middle -- thus:
The restless Alexander was able to triumph over many other cities and countries without losing a single battle, and spread the Greek culture while doing so.
This should be the last sentence in your introduction. The rest of the paragraphs should provide detail and explanation to prove that everything in your statement is true.
The restless Alexander was able to triumph over many other cities and countries without losing a single battle, and spread the Greek culture while doing so.
This should be the last sentence in your introduction. The rest of the paragraphs should provide detail and explanation to prove that everything in your statement is true.
Thank you for all of your help. I really appreciate it. Have a speculator day!
You're welcome! Go write an A paper!!
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