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Indo - Europeans Essay

How did the religion of the Hebrews differ from many of the religions of their neighbors?

Hebrews were monotheists. They prayed to only one god, unlike their neighbors. Their neighbors were polytheists. Hebrews worshiped Yahweh. Yahweh was their one and only god. Other religions sacrificed humans while that wasn't part of the Hebrew religion. "The Hebrews believed they had a special relationship with their God and that they were God's chosen people." Hebrews lived by the ten commandments given by their god. Egyptian religion had no doctrine. If they did it was usually passed down orally.
The egyptians worshiped gods of the stars, stones, and water. Egyptians believed in afterlife.

Answer 1

This will be fine, if you get rid of the word Egyptians. The Hebrew's neighbors were from several different countries. You could call them pagans.

Answer 2

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Hebrews were monotheists. They prayed to only one god, unlike their neighbors. Their neighbors were polytheists. Hebrews worshiped Yahweh. Yahweh was their one and only god. Other religions sacrificed humans while that wasn't part of the Hebrew religion. "The Hebrews believed they had a special relationship with their God and that they were God's chosen people." Hebrews lived by the ten commandments given by their god. Pagans religion had no doctrine. If they did it was usually passed down orally.
Other religions worshiped gods of the stars, stones, and water. Pagans believed in afterlife.

Answer 3

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