Your analysis of the reasons behind the opposition Atticus faces in To Kill a Mockingbird is off to a strong start, and you provide relevant evidence to support your topic sentence. However, there are some areas where you could clarify your ideas and improve the organization for better coherence. Below are some suggestions for refining your writing:
Topic Sentence:
- Your original: "In To Kill a Mockingbird, the residents of Maycomb oppose Atticus' decisions due to their own personal prejudice against black people."
- Suggestion: "In To Kill a Mockingbird, the residents of Maycomb oppose Atticus's decision to defend Tom Robinson primarily because of their ingrained prejudices against black individuals."
Evidence 1:
- Your original: "Many people in the community can’t accept the fact that a black man deserves any fair treatment or any chance for justice. For instance, Ms Dubose and others expressed their disapproval of Atticus defending Tom. They were filled with fear for supporting Atticus and felt like he was bringing shame upon himself and his family by going against the norms of the Maycomb community."
- Suggestion: "Many members of the community struggle to accept that a black man, Tom Robinson, deserves fair treatment or a chance for justice. For example, Mrs. Dubose and other residents openly express their disapproval of Atticus defending Tom, fearing that his actions could bring shame upon himself and his family by challenging the deeply entrenched social norms of Maycomb."
Explanation 1:
- Your original: "Many of Mr. Atticus' friends could not understand his actions for wanting to represent a black man."
- Suggestion: "Many of Atticus's friends fail to grasp why he would choose to represent a black man. They perceive his defense of Tom as a threat to their community's established social order."
Evidence 2:
- Your original: "Similarly, when Atticus sister, Alexandra came to visit, she really disapproves of her brother decision to defend a black man."
- Suggestion: "Similarly, when Atticus's sister, Alexandra, visits, she strongly disapproves of his decision to defend a black man."
Explanation 2:
- Your original: "His own family didn't stand behind him or see how him defending a black man was a moral thing to do."
- Suggestion: "Even his own family does not support him, as they fail to recognize the moral imperative of defending a black man in a prejudiced society. Alexandra is primarily concerned about the family's reputation and how it may be perceived by others."
Final Thoughts:
Make sure to proofread for grammatical accuracy, especially in your use of apostrophes (e.g., "Atticus's" instead of "Atticus'"). Overall, you have a solid foundation and your points are well-supported with examples from the text. With these refinements, your argument will be clearer and more persuasive. Keep up the good work!