How can i write this lead in past tense?
LEDE: Owners of Steak & Ale restaurant settles a 1-Million lawsuit for selling alcohol to a minor that eventually led to the young man's death.
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Change settles to settled.
So does this sound right?
LEDE: Owners of Steak & Ale restaurant settled a $ 1 Million lawsuit for selling alcohol to a minor that eventually led to the man's death.
LEDE: Owners of Steak & Ale restaurant settled a $ 1 Million lawsuit for selling alcohol to a minor that eventually led to the man's death.
I'd add "The" >> The owners of . . .
Also, saying the "young" man's death makes it clear that it was the minor who died.
Even better would be to include the man's age. >> the 20-year-old man's death.
The owners of Steak & Ale Restaurant settled a $1 million lawsuit for selling alcohol to a minor that eventually led to the 20-year-old man's death.
Also, saying the "young" man's death makes it clear that it was the minor who died.
Even better would be to include the man's age. >> the 20-year-old man's death.
The owners of Steak & Ale Restaurant settled a $1 million lawsuit for selling alcohol to a minor that eventually led to the 20-year-old man's death.
Thank You Ms Sue