how can i put this in a much better sentence?

Question

Their acquaintance starts off unpleasantly but Elizabeth’s personality catches Mr. Darcy’s heart and finds himself attracted to her.

Answer 1

More concise language and construction. Try something like this:

Elizabeth and Mr. Darcy's acquaintance starts off pleasantly, but soon Mr. Darcy finds himself strongly attracted to Elizabeth because of her ____ personality.

(You determine the adjective you want to put in before "personality.")

Answer 2

[Well, that's not much more concise, but the clauses and phrases are less flip-floppy all over the place!]

Answer 3

I think it's NICE .