Here's what I got!

Thesis: The rise of Alexander the Great was so remarkable due first to his parental influence, and then his military strategies, lastly his potential strength.

1. Alexander's parents encouraged him to be a great man and leader.

2. In order to suceed in a battle, he knew that it was essential to have a well-trained army for victories.

3.To win a battle didn't necessary mean to be powerful strength, but to know what battlefield tactics were required.

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I have to go now, have to work.
But I'll come back later to check it.
If there anything missing, please let me know.
Later.
Hey, that is pretty good.
I am not a fan of his mother though.