Hello there! (: If someone could proofread this summary for me that would so great!

In Bob Herbert’s column, “Tweet Less, Kiss More” he addresses the negative impact technology’s left on society today. He states how it affects focus, safety, and authenticity. He refers to technology encouraging distraction from the important parts of life along with everyday tasks, such as driving. In this statement, he discusses an engagement party his friend attends, “She said it was lovely…But all the guests had their cellphones…and had text-messaged their way through the entire event”. On the subject of safety, he mentions a friend “who commutes…between New York and New Jersey. He props up his laptop on the front seat so he can watch DVDs while he’s driving”. Herbert remarks that he’s not against the advancements of technology but indicates that society should “…control it, bending it to our human purposes” so that they don’t “lose sight of what is truly human in ourselves, and that includes…those very special, mostly nonmaterial tings that would fulfill us, give meaning to our lives, enlarge us, and enable us to more easily embrace those around us.”

Are there too many quotes from the article in this paragraph?

4 answers

This is good, but I do think there are too many quotes. Please paraphrase about half of them.
Okay! Thanks so much!
You're very welcome.
I'm actually writing about this article right now and your explanation was very helpful. However too many quotes were present so you should paraphrase.
Similar Questions
  1. Pakicetus Summary:Ambulocetus Summary: Rodhocetus Summary: Dorudon Summary: Odontocetes Summary: Mysticetes Summary: Sources
    1. answers icon 1 answer
  2. Pakicetus Summary:Ambulocetus Summary: Rodhocetus Summary: Dorudon Summary: Odontocetes Summary: Mysticetes Summary:
    1. answers icon 1 answer
  3. Which of the following statements is true of a summary?1. A summary condenses the main points of an article. 2. A summary is
    1. answers icon 3 answers
  4. Which of the following statements is true about summaries?a.A summary expresses the author's thoughts and ideas. b.A summary
    1. answers icon 1 answer
more similar questions