for my descriptive essay, my teachaer approved the Asheville outline that i made...that's why i was waiting to start writing.
here is the extended outline. please make any corrections:
Broad Subject: vacation spots
Limited Topic: Asheville, North Carolina
Main idea about this topic: fun place
Thesis without three-step format: Asheville is a fun and relaxing place to visit
Three-step Format for thesis: river, picnic spots, ice-cream parlor
Thesis with three-step format: Asheville, North Carolina, is a fun and relaxing place to visit because of its refreshing river, beautiful picnic spots, and various ice-cream parlors.
Outline
Introduction: Paragraph 1
a. Main idea for the essay – Asheville is a fun place
b. Thesis-Asheville, North Carolina, is a fun and relaxing place to visit because of its refreshing river, beautiful picnic spots, and various ice-cream parlors.
Body: Topic sentences for paragraphs 2, 3, and 4
a. Asheville’s river is refreshing and relaxing (paragraph 2)
b. The picnic spots are beautiful and peaceful (paragraph 3)
c. There are various ice-cream parlors for more fun and enjoyment (paragraph 4)
Conclusion: Paragraph 5
a. Restated thesis statement—Asheville is a good vacation spot
b. Ends with a clincher—
(i'm not sure about the last thing--clincher)
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b. Thesis-Asheville, North Carolina, is a fun and relaxing place to visit because of its refreshing river, beautiful picnic spots, and various ice-cream parlors.
Body: Topic sentences for paragraphs 2, 3, and 4
a. Asheville’s river is refreshing and relaxing (paragraph 2)
b. The picnic spots are beautiful and peaceful (paragraph 3)
c. There are various ice-cream parlors for more fun and enjoyment (paragraph 4)
Conclusion: Paragraph 5
a. Restated thesis statement—Asheville is a good vacation spot
b. Ends with a clincher—
Outline
Introduction: Paragraph 1
a.Main idea for the essay – Asheville is a fun place
b.Thesis-Asheville, North Carolina, is a fun and relaxing place to visit because of its refreshing river, beautiful picnic spots, and various ice-cream parlors.
Body: Topic sentences for paragraphs 2, 3, and 4
a.Asheville’s river is refreshing and relaxing (paragraph 2)
b.The picnic spots are beautiful and peaceful (paragraph 3)
c.There are various ice-cream parlors for more fun and enjoyment (paragraph 4)
Conclusion: Paragraph 5
a.Restated thesis statement—Asheville is a good vacation spot
b.Ends with a clincher—
(i'm not sure about the last thing--clincher)
Broad Subject: Frank O’Conner’s “First Confession”
Limited Topic: Jackie’s trait (Jackie is a character in “First Confession.”)
Main idea about this topic: childishness (He is a character who demonstrated childish actions in “First Confession.”)
Thesis without three-step format: The main trait of Jackie is in his childishness
Three-step Format for thesis: responses, outlook, anger
Thesis with three-step format: Jackie’s childishness is emphasized in his responses, outlook, and anger.
Outline
Introduction: Paragraph 1
a.Main idea for the essay—Jackie’s childishness
b.Thesis—Jackie’s childishness is emphasized in his responses, outlook, and anger
Body: Topic sentences for paragraphs 2, 3, and 4
a.Jackie’s responses show childishness impressionability (paragraph 2)
b.His outlook reflects the simplicity of a child (paragraph 3)
c.His anger is also that of a child (paragraph 4)
Conclusion: Paragraph 5
a.Restated thesis statement—Jackie seems real as a child
b.Ends with a clincher—the reality and consistency of Jackie as a child
Tips -- you may want to use a thesaurus to find colorful synonyms. The word "fun" should only be used once (if at all) in your descriptive essay.
Also -- avoid using the "to be" verbs (am, is, are, was, were, being, been). Almost all verbs should be action words and in active, not passive.
Good luck. Please post your essay in a couple of days after you've revised your first draft.
so i will post it up as soon as i'm done. or if i need help
thanks again