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TO: Deb.Walker@
CC: Jeremy.Dittmer; m_hopkins@
SUBJECT: Sexual harassment and unlawful discrimination in the workplace seminar

Dear Deb:

I would like to confirm our arrangements as we previously discussed on our seminar about sexual harassment and unlawful discrimination in the workplace. The seminar is to be held September 14, 2012 at 10 am in the conference room located on the first floor in 105. You are welcome to come ahead of time to set up as early as 9 am. The seminar will be two hours long with a fifteen minute break that will take place at 11 am. Refreshments will be delivered by the hospital during the break time. As I understand you will provide the appropriate pamphlets, follow along booklets, and help line numbers for our employees. The hospital will set up the table, chairs, screen and projector the evening prior to your arrival.
If you have any further questions or concerns please do not hesitate to contact me at 802-585-8668.

Sincerely,
Shawna Paker
S_parker@

Answer 1

I would like to confirm our arrangements for our seminar about sexual harassment and unlawful discrimination in the workplace. The seminar is to be held September 14, 2012, at 10 am in the conference room located on the first floor in 105. You are welcome to come ahead of time to set up as early as 9 am. The seminar will be two hours long with a fifteen minute break about 11 am. Refreshments will be delivered by the hospital during the break time. I understand you will provide the appropriate pamphlets, follow along booklets, and help line numbers for our employees. The hospital will set up the table, chairs, screen and projector the evening prior to your arrival.
If you have any further questions or concerns, please contact me at 802-585-8668.

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