Could you please help me re word my paragrah? It needs to be at least 100 words.

Question

Media convergence is the merging of mass communications outlets such as television, radio and the Internet along with portable and interactive technologies though various digital presentation platforms. Media convergence allows mass media professionals to tell and present information and entertainment using a variety of media. One example of early media convergence was WebTV which has tended to be much less important as the performance/cost of PC's has improved to eliminate the perceived benefits of combining the Internet with television. Other examples of mass media convergence are print and television, radio and internet. Media convergence is a phenomenon as revolutionary to communication as the invention of movable type or electronic communication.

Answer 1

Have you followed Sra's advice and read this aloud?

Answer 2

I could not find her other post. I did read it aloud and to me it sounds good, but that is probably because I have read it over and over again for an hour.

Answer 3

My advice is to let it sit a day or two, and then come back to it with fresh eyes.

My husband was the author of nine published books. He ALWAYS let anything he wrote sit for a day or more before he did his first editing.

Answer 4

http://www.jiskha.com/display.cgi?id=1312242835