Question

Could you please check to see if it covers all these factors.

- cost of living on your own
-factors that add to your achievement in the workplace
-educational attainment and earning potential
-current skills and talents and your future route
-benefits/opportunities available to those with post-secondary education
-opportunity trade-offs in leaving school before graduation


Everything seems so perfect, my dreams have fulfilled, and my career is a success. By keeping myself attached to my work, my learning outcomes have proved to be a victory. It all started out with high school, by obtaining good grades in high school, I have been able to pass all classes and graduate with a high school diploma in my hand. My credits came in as a handy tool, as I was able to enter university because of them. I remember my first steps in University; post secondary education allowed me to gain knowledge which helped me to deal with life experiences as well as the obstacles life brings my way. It put me in a social environment, and gave me the chance to meet new and interesting people and allowed me to go through experiences that helped me gain the independence I needed to handle tough situations. It opened a door for me from where I could choose from a variety of choices. My desire was to become a Pharmacist, and with the experience of post secondary education, I have been able to gain the skills and knowledge I had needed for this occupation. I am what I had hoped to become. My occupation as a Pharmacist has settled. My earning potential is very high, and I have started saving this money into my RRSP. I share the same qualities as I did before, when I worked at a grocery store. My attitude is positive towards everything, and I enjoy my job. I love being a Pharmacist; my job at the drugstore is wonderful. I dispense drugs and medicines prescribed by Physicians and health practioners. I learned about medical knowledge at university, and I’m able to inform my customers about the purpose, hazards, and side affects of the drugs I dispense. I am not just able to buy my needs, infact I can purchase as many wants as I can. I have enough money to do what I want, and ofcourse I have left some aside to pay for insurances, taxes, and utilities.

Answer 1

"My earning potential is very high, and I have started saving this money into my RRSP."

You're only putting a small amount of your salary into your retirement account.

You might also mention paying for rent, food, and clothing in the last sentence.

The rest is very good. :-)

Answer 2

Is this better?:


My earning potential is very high, and I have started adding small amounts of my salary into my RRSP.

I am not just able to buy my needs, infact I can purchase as many wants as I can. I have enough money to do what I want, and ofcourse I have left some aside to pay for insurances, taxes, rent, food, and clothing.

( I left utilities out because since Im mentioning rent,--rent includes utilities)

Answer 3

Great! Good job, Sara!

Answer 4

Thanks so much Ms. Sue:D

Answer 5

You're very welcome, Sara!