1. needs a period at the end. Otherwise, it's OK.
2. To whom does "she" refer in the main clause? The first "she" or the old woman?
3. Re-think the tense of the main verb.
4. OK
5. OK
Could you check my sentences. Thank you very much
1. If you ask her, she'll tell you the story
2. When she talked to the old woman, she would only smile and nod.
3. If she listens carefully, she could hear someone moving around upstairs in the house.
4. If she spoke, the room grew silent and felt cold.
5. When he thinks back, he can still remember the pale figure standing in the doorway.
5 answers
4 should be when instead of if
#4 could use either "If" or "When" Either one will work, but the meaning changes a bit with each one.
3
could be
If she listened carefully, she could hear someone moving around upstairs in the house
could be
If she listened carefully, she could hear someone moving around upstairs in the house
Yes, right.