CHARACTERS
- Main character: teenage student athlete
- Coach
- Teammates
- Opponent team
SETTING
- High school gym
- Local track field
- Competing team's school
PROBLEM
- Main character is injured during a crucial basketball game
- Needs to overcome the injury in order to lead the team to victory
- Faces doubts and criticisms from teammates and opponents
PLOT
Beginning
- Main character is known for his athletic abilities and leadership skills
- Team is in the championship game against a tough opponent
- Main character gets injured early in the game, making it difficult for him to play
Middle
- Main character struggles to overcome his injury and doubts
- Coach and teammates rally to support him and help him recover
- Main character goes through physical therapy and training to get back in shape
- Faces negative comments and taunts from the opposing team
End
- Main character makes a dramatic comeback in the final minutes of the game
- Leads the team to victory with a game-winning shot
- Receives praise and support from teammates, coach, and fans
- Learns the importance of perseverance and determination in the face of challenges
RESOLUTION
- Main character's injury becomes a turning point in his athletic career, teaching him valuable lessons about resilience and teamwork
- Team wins the championship, bringing pride and joy to their school and community.
Choose one of these topics for a narrative of your own. Then, copy this chart and use it to plan your narrative.
a challenge faced by a student athlete
how some hikers dealt with an unexpected storm
a child from a small village first experiencing a city
how a teenager got his town to do something important
CHARACTERS
SETTING
PROBLEM
PLOT
Beginning
Middle
End
RESOLUTION
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Look at the first draft you wrote. You have already revised it to refine your choice of words. Read the draft again. Use this list from the video to make improvements. Answer each group of questions, one at a time, and make revisions as needed. Then, edit your draft.
Does the introduction engage the reader?
Does it introduce the narrator or main characters?
Does it set the context for the story, such as describing the setting or introducing a conflict?
Does the sequence of events unfold naturally and logically?
Is dialogue used at the right times to develop the characters and move the story forward?
Is description used, including sensory language and descriptive details, to help develop the experiences, events, and characters?
Is the packing effective for the story? Does the story move along?
Does the conclusion follow from and reflect on the narrated experiences?
Are the sentences written in a way that gets ideas across clearly?
Did I use the best word choice to express my ideas?
Are all the words spelled correctly?
Are there any errors in grammar, such as verb tense or subject-verb agreement with prepositional phrases?
Are there any errors in punctuation or capitalization?
Does the introduction engage the reader?
Does it introduce the narrator or main characters?
Does it set the context for the story, such as describing the setting or introducing a conflict?
Does the sequence of events unfold naturally and logically?
Is dialogue used at the right times to develop the characters and move the story forward?
Is description used, including sensory language and descriptive details, to help develop the experiences, events, and characters?
Is the packing effective for the story? Does the story move along?
Does the conclusion follow from and reflect on the narrated experiences?
Are the sentences written in a way that gets ideas across clearly?
Did I use the best word choice to express my ideas?
Are all the words spelled correctly?
Are there any errors in grammar, such as verb tense or subject-verb agreement with prepositional phrases?
Are there any errors in punctuation or capitalization?
CHARACTERS
- Main character: teenage student athlete named Sean
- Coach: Coach Thompson
- Teammates: Jake, Maya, and Sarah
- Opponent team captain: Alex
SETTING
- High school gym during a championship basketball game
- Local track field for practice
- Competing team's school basketball court for the final game
PROBLEM
- Sean injures his ankle during the championship game, affecting his ability to play well
- Sean faces doubts from his teammates regarding his recovery and ability to lead the team to victory
- The opponent team captain, Alex, taunts Sean about his injury, putting additional pressure on him
PLOT
Beginning
- Sean is introduced as the star player and captain of the basketball team with high expectations
- The championship game begins, and Sean quickly injures his ankle in the first quarter
Middle
- Sean struggles to overcome his injury and doubts, undergoing physical therapy and training to recover
- Coach Thompson supports Sean and works on a strategy to make up for his absence on the court
- Teammates Jake, Maya, and Sarah show their solidarity by practicing harder and encouraging Sean to get better
- Sean faces taunts and challenges from Alex, the opponent team captain, which fuels his determination to come back stronger
End
- In the final minutes of the game, Sean makes a miraculous comeback, scoring the game-winning shot
- The team wins the championship, celebrating their victory together
- Sean's resilience and determination inspire his teammates and the school community
- Sean learns the valuable lesson of perseverance and teamwork, united by their shared victory
RESOLUTION
- Sean's injury becomes a pivotal moment in his athletic career, teaching him the importance of overcoming challenges and working together as a team
- The team's championship win brings pride and joy to the school, solidifying their bond and determination to succeed.
Revisions:
- Added names to characters for better engagement with the reader
- Clarified the setting for each part of the narrative
- Enhanced the description of Sean's journey to overcome his injury and lead the team to victory
- Improved the coherence and flow of the plot to unfold logically
- Revised dialogue and character interactions to deepen the development of the story
- Main character: teenage student athlete named Sean
- Coach: Coach Thompson
- Teammates: Jake, Maya, and Sarah
- Opponent team captain: Alex
SETTING
- High school gym during a championship basketball game
- Local track field for practice
- Competing team's school basketball court for the final game
PROBLEM
- Sean injures his ankle during the championship game, affecting his ability to play well
- Sean faces doubts from his teammates regarding his recovery and ability to lead the team to victory
- The opponent team captain, Alex, taunts Sean about his injury, putting additional pressure on him
PLOT
Beginning
- Sean is introduced as the star player and captain of the basketball team with high expectations
- The championship game begins, and Sean quickly injures his ankle in the first quarter
Middle
- Sean struggles to overcome his injury and doubts, undergoing physical therapy and training to recover
- Coach Thompson supports Sean and works on a strategy to make up for his absence on the court
- Teammates Jake, Maya, and Sarah show their solidarity by practicing harder and encouraging Sean to get better
- Sean faces taunts and challenges from Alex, the opponent team captain, which fuels his determination to come back stronger
End
- In the final minutes of the game, Sean makes a miraculous comeback, scoring the game-winning shot
- The team wins the championship, celebrating their victory together
- Sean's resilience and determination inspire his teammates and the school community
- Sean learns the valuable lesson of perseverance and teamwork, united by their shared victory
RESOLUTION
- Sean's injury becomes a pivotal moment in his athletic career, teaching him the importance of overcoming challenges and working together as a team
- The team's championship win brings pride and joy to the school, solidifying their bond and determination to succeed.
Revisions:
- Added names to characters for better engagement with the reader
- Clarified the setting for each part of the narrative
- Enhanced the description of Sean's journey to overcome his injury and lead the team to victory
- Improved the coherence and flow of the plot to unfold logically
- Revised dialogue and character interactions to deepen the development of the story
Once you have completed a strong draft of a piece of writing, you may choose to have a reader look it over before you create a final draft. Your reader may give you feedback—comments that evaluate the writing—that can make your work better.
A narrative may have more than one goal, or purpose. Usually, you want your narrative to entertain your reader—to cause amusement, horror, or delight, for example. If your reader’s feedback indicates that they were not entertained, you need to make some changes.
You may want your narrative to teach a lesson. Many folktales and fables teach the reader a lesson as well as offering an entertaining story. If your reader cannot understand the lesson in your narrative, you need to make changes.
For your narrative to succeed in its purpose, you must communicate clearly with your audience, the reader. Your characters must be interesting, your setting should be described in detail, and your plot must make sense.
As you read over your finished draft, ask yourself how well it suits your purpose and audience. Ask for feedback if you wish. You may need to make final revisions to ensure your narrative succeeds in its purpose. Here are some questions to consider.
PURPOSE
Does my narrative fulfill my purpose? Will it entertain my reader?
Are my characters interesting? Is my plot clear and logical?
If my story teaches a lesson, is that lesson clear?
AUDIENCE
What kinds of stories does my audience like? Will my audience enjoy what I wrote?
Did I choose words that tell exactly how things look, how people feel, and what happens?
Can my audience understand the point of view from which my story is told?
The rubric here will help you to assess your writing. Read it carefully and use it to judge how well you have followed the rules for writing a narrative.
A narrative may have more than one goal, or purpose. Usually, you want your narrative to entertain your reader—to cause amusement, horror, or delight, for example. If your reader’s feedback indicates that they were not entertained, you need to make some changes.
You may want your narrative to teach a lesson. Many folktales and fables teach the reader a lesson as well as offering an entertaining story. If your reader cannot understand the lesson in your narrative, you need to make changes.
For your narrative to succeed in its purpose, you must communicate clearly with your audience, the reader. Your characters must be interesting, your setting should be described in detail, and your plot must make sense.
As you read over your finished draft, ask yourself how well it suits your purpose and audience. Ask for feedback if you wish. You may need to make final revisions to ensure your narrative succeeds in its purpose. Here are some questions to consider.
PURPOSE
Does my narrative fulfill my purpose? Will it entertain my reader?
Are my characters interesting? Is my plot clear and logical?
If my story teaches a lesson, is that lesson clear?
AUDIENCE
What kinds of stories does my audience like? Will my audience enjoy what I wrote?
Did I choose words that tell exactly how things look, how people feel, and what happens?
Can my audience understand the point of view from which my story is told?
The rubric here will help you to assess your writing. Read it carefully and use it to judge how well you have followed the rules for writing a narrative.
PURPOSE
- My narrative fulfills its purpose by entertaining the reader with a story of resilience, teamwork, and victory.
- The characters, especially Sean, are developed to be relatable and engaging for the audience.
- The plot is clear, logical, and follows a natural progression, culminating in a satisfying conclusion.
- The lesson of perseverance and teamwork is evident in Sean's journey and victory.
AUDIENCE
- This narrative is likely to appeal to audiences who enjoy sports stories, underdog victories, and themes of overcoming adversity.
- The descriptive language used helps paint a vivid picture for the audience, allowing them to visualize the setting, characters, and events clearly.
- The point of view is from Sean's perspective, allowing readers to empathize with his struggles and triumphs.
RUBRIC EVALUATION
- Introduction: The narrative effectively engages the reader with a high-stakes basketball game and the protagonist's injury, setting up the conflict.
- Plot Development: The sequence of events unfolds naturally, with logical progression and character development along the way.
- Dialogue and Description: Dialogue is used appropriately to develop characters and move the story forward, while descriptive language enhances the reader's experience.
- Conclusion: The conclusion follows from the narrated experiences, reflecting on Sean's journey and the team's victory.
- Clarity and Mechanics: The narrative is written clearly, with effective word choice, correct spelling, grammar, punctuation, and capitalization throughout.
By assessing the narrative against these criteria, it appears to fulfill its purpose of entertaining the reader with a compelling story of a student athlete's triumph. The feedback received and revisions made have strengthened the narrative, ensuring that it is engaging, clear, and impactful for its intended audience.
- My narrative fulfills its purpose by entertaining the reader with a story of resilience, teamwork, and victory.
- The characters, especially Sean, are developed to be relatable and engaging for the audience.
- The plot is clear, logical, and follows a natural progression, culminating in a satisfying conclusion.
- The lesson of perseverance and teamwork is evident in Sean's journey and victory.
AUDIENCE
- This narrative is likely to appeal to audiences who enjoy sports stories, underdog victories, and themes of overcoming adversity.
- The descriptive language used helps paint a vivid picture for the audience, allowing them to visualize the setting, characters, and events clearly.
- The point of view is from Sean's perspective, allowing readers to empathize with his struggles and triumphs.
RUBRIC EVALUATION
- Introduction: The narrative effectively engages the reader with a high-stakes basketball game and the protagonist's injury, setting up the conflict.
- Plot Development: The sequence of events unfolds naturally, with logical progression and character development along the way.
- Dialogue and Description: Dialogue is used appropriately to develop characters and move the story forward, while descriptive language enhances the reader's experience.
- Conclusion: The conclusion follows from the narrated experiences, reflecting on Sean's journey and the team's victory.
- Clarity and Mechanics: The narrative is written clearly, with effective word choice, correct spelling, grammar, punctuation, and capitalization throughout.
By assessing the narrative against these criteria, it appears to fulfill its purpose of entertaining the reader with a compelling story of a student athlete's triumph. The feedback received and revisions made have strengthened the narrative, ensuring that it is engaging, clear, and impactful for its intended audience.
and now make it like 4th grader wrote it
Title: Sean's Big Win
Once there was a boy named Sean who loved playing basketball. He was the captain of his high school team, and everyone looked up to him. They had a big championship game coming up, and Sean was so excited to lead his team to victory.
But, during the game, Sean hurt his ankle! Ouch! It was really bad, and he couldn't play properly. His friends on the team, Jake, Maya, and Sarah, were worried. The other team's captain, Alex, started teasing Sean about his injury, which made him feel sad.
Sean didn't give up, though. He worked hard to get better, with help from his coach, Coach Thompson. His friends cheered him on and practiced extra hard to support him. Finally, in the last minutes of the game, Sean made an amazing comeback and scored the winning shot!
The team won the championship, and everyone was so happy. Sean learned that you should never give up, no matter how hard things get. He was a hero for his team and his school, and he felt really proud.
In the end, Sean's injury turned out to be a lesson in perseverance and teamwork. He showed that if you work together and believe in yourself, you can achieve anything. It was a big win for Sean and his friends, and they celebrated their victory together. Go, Sean!
Once there was a boy named Sean who loved playing basketball. He was the captain of his high school team, and everyone looked up to him. They had a big championship game coming up, and Sean was so excited to lead his team to victory.
But, during the game, Sean hurt his ankle! Ouch! It was really bad, and he couldn't play properly. His friends on the team, Jake, Maya, and Sarah, were worried. The other team's captain, Alex, started teasing Sean about his injury, which made him feel sad.
Sean didn't give up, though. He worked hard to get better, with help from his coach, Coach Thompson. His friends cheered him on and practiced extra hard to support him. Finally, in the last minutes of the game, Sean made an amazing comeback and scored the winning shot!
The team won the championship, and everyone was so happy. Sean learned that you should never give up, no matter how hard things get. He was a hero for his team and his school, and he felt really proud.
In the end, Sean's injury turned out to be a lesson in perseverance and teamwork. He showed that if you work together and believe in yourself, you can achieve anything. It was a big win for Sean and his friends, and they celebrated their victory together. Go, Sean!
now rewrite the whole thing but misspell things randomly
Title: Shawn's Big Wynn
One thare was a boi named Shawn who loved playng basketbal. He was the captin of his high skool teem, and evryone lukd up to him. They had a big champyonship game coming up, and Shawn was so ecited to lead his teem to victory.
But, during the game, Shawn hurt his ankle! Ouch! It was relly bad, and he culdn't play properley. His frends on the teem, Jake, Mayah, and Saira, were wurreed. The other teem's captin, Alex, startid teasing Shawn about his injury, which made him feel sad.
Shawn didn't give up, tho. He worked hard to get beter, with help from his coatch, Coatch Thompson. His frends cheerred him on and practised extra hard to support him. Finnaly, in the last minuts of the game, Shawn made an amaziing comeback and scored the wining shot!
The teem won the champyonship, and evryone was so happy. Shawn lurned that you shuld nevr give up, no matr how hard things get. He was a hero for his teem and his skool, and he felt really proud.
In the end, Shawn's injury turned out to be a lessun in perseverence and teamwork. He showed that if you work together and belive in yourself, you can achive enything. It was a big win for Shawn and his frends, and they selibrated their victory together. Go, Shawn!
One thare was a boi named Shawn who loved playng basketbal. He was the captin of his high skool teem, and evryone lukd up to him. They had a big champyonship game coming up, and Shawn was so ecited to lead his teem to victory.
But, during the game, Shawn hurt his ankle! Ouch! It was relly bad, and he culdn't play properley. His frends on the teem, Jake, Mayah, and Saira, were wurreed. The other teem's captin, Alex, startid teasing Shawn about his injury, which made him feel sad.
Shawn didn't give up, tho. He worked hard to get beter, with help from his coatch, Coatch Thompson. His frends cheerred him on and practised extra hard to support him. Finnaly, in the last minuts of the game, Shawn made an amaziing comeback and scored the wining shot!
The teem won the champyonship, and evryone was so happy. Shawn lurned that you shuld nevr give up, no matr how hard things get. He was a hero for his teem and his skool, and he felt really proud.
In the end, Shawn's injury turned out to be a lessun in perseverence and teamwork. He showed that if you work together and belive in yourself, you can achive enything. It was a big win for Shawn and his frends, and they selibrated their victory together. Go, Shawn!
misspell 6 things and make a diffrent story
Title: Tommy's Great Adventure
One there was a bboy named Tommy who lived in a small toon in the mountains. He had alwways dreamed of visiting the big sitty. One day, he finally had the chance to go on a trip with his family to the city.
Tommy was so ecited to see all the tall buildinggs, bright lights, and busy streets. Everything was so diffrent from his quiet little toon. He felt a little nervos, but also very curius about all the new things to see and do.
As soon as they arrived in the sitty, Tommy's eyes widdened with amazemnt. He saw skyscarpers reaching into the clouds, cars honking loudly, and people rushing everywhere. It was like a whole new world for him to explore.
They visited museums, parks, and even a big shopping mall. Tommy tried new foods and saw street performers playing music. He met other kids his age and played games in the park. It was the most excitting adventure of his young life.
When it was time to go back to their quiet little toon in the mountains, Tommy felt a mixtur of sadness and happyness. He was gratefull for the experience of seeing the big sitty and meeting new freinds. Tommy knew that no matter where he was, he could always find excitement and joy in new places and new faces.
One there was a bboy named Tommy who lived in a small toon in the mountains. He had alwways dreamed of visiting the big sitty. One day, he finally had the chance to go on a trip with his family to the city.
Tommy was so ecited to see all the tall buildinggs, bright lights, and busy streets. Everything was so diffrent from his quiet little toon. He felt a little nervos, but also very curius about all the new things to see and do.
As soon as they arrived in the sitty, Tommy's eyes widdened with amazemnt. He saw skyscarpers reaching into the clouds, cars honking loudly, and people rushing everywhere. It was like a whole new world for him to explore.
They visited museums, parks, and even a big shopping mall. Tommy tried new foods and saw street performers playing music. He met other kids his age and played games in the park. It was the most excitting adventure of his young life.
When it was time to go back to their quiet little toon in the mountains, Tommy felt a mixtur of sadness and happyness. He was gratefull for the experience of seeing the big sitty and meeting new freinds. Tommy knew that no matter where he was, he could always find excitement and joy in new places and new faces.
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