. . . has been serving its food . . .
. . . visit this magnificent restaurant?
4th sentence: Don't start with "Well."
I don't want to be "blown away." Find a better expression.
. . . by the servers
O.K. I quit. That's far too many errors in just four sentences. I see several more mistakes that I'm sure you can find if you proofread carefully and watch out for pronoun/antecedent agreement.
Can you tell me if this is a good start on my persuasive paragraph !
Sit down for a change. Take a seat at El Toro! El Toro has been serving their food since 1998. Do you know why you should visit the magnificent restaurant? Well when you go and take a seat there you will be blown away by the serves. They serve fast and always have a smile on their face. They keep things tidy and clean. They have put their own little style in it. You also have a verity of things to choose from. Like, burritos, taco, fêtes, and salads.
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Ignoring the errors, which is difficult to do, I don't find it persuasive. I am attracted to resturants that are quiet, not trendy, have a menu variety, and properly cook the food.
I am not impressed with the age of the restaurant, the seats (although I like highback chairs), the servers need to be polite and attentive, they need not smile unless they are happy. I am wondering why the servers are keeping the table tidy and clean? Ok, that is nice. I am not certain of the focus on burritos, tacos, fajitas, and salads. I eat Mexican often, but not that stuff.
Now my point: Just who are you trying to persuade? If it is the college crowd, you didn't mention beer. If it is family, you didn't mention at all kid friendly (kids menu). If it is the office lunch crowd, you did mention fast, but avoid "healthy". So who were you trying to persuade? That is the essence of persuasive writing, you are writing to an audience: overcome their fears, reluctance, and then cater to their ego.
Have fun.
I am not impressed with the age of the restaurant, the seats (although I like highback chairs), the servers need to be polite and attentive, they need not smile unless they are happy. I am wondering why the servers are keeping the table tidy and clean? Ok, that is nice. I am not certain of the focus on burritos, tacos, fajitas, and salads. I eat Mexican often, but not that stuff.
Now my point: Just who are you trying to persuade? If it is the college crowd, you didn't mention beer. If it is family, you didn't mention at all kid friendly (kids menu). If it is the office lunch crowd, you did mention fast, but avoid "healthy". So who were you trying to persuade? That is the essence of persuasive writing, you are writing to an audience: overcome their fears, reluctance, and then cater to their ego.
Have fun.
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