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Real Men Truly Change
What is forgiveness? Forgiveness is when you allow someone to be forgiven for doing something wrong to you or someone else. On February 21, 1988 at the Family Worship Center in Baton Rouge, La, a speech made by Jimmy Swaggart titled, “Apology Sermon, “he wanted forgiveness from his family, friends, and the nation for having an affair. Also, on September 11, 1998 at the annual White House prayer breakfast, Bill Clinton speech titled, “I Have Sinned,” asked for forgiveness for having an affair as well, in the speech. These speeches both showed the same theme of wanting forgiveness, through usage of repetition and word choice.
The theme I got from the speeches, “Every Cloud has a Silver Lining,” was just because something bad happens; there may be a good or bad outcome to the situation. One reason for that is, in the speech both Jimmy and Bill wanted forgiveness from people, and wanted God to wash their sin away. Both men were deeply sincere and confronted the truth instead of lying to the nation. Maybe the situation had a good or bad outcome, we don’t know. However, you learn from your mistakes and you know better next time.
The literary devices such as repetition and word choice also fit examples with the theme and the perspective on forgiveness. When Jimmy Swaggart repeatedly said, “I have sinned against you and I beg your forgiveness. Jimmy wanted everyone to forget what he did and remember the old Jimmy. Also, when Jimmy Swaggart pronounced he wants everyone to forgive him and forget what happened. The same reason he just wanted to be forgave for what he did, though everyone felt like he made a big fool of himself and disappointed people that looked up to him. Bill Clinton, our 46th president said, “Broken spirit,” at the end of almost every sentence of his speech wanting to be a known as a different person, not the person he was when he committed adultery. He was supposed to lead the world in a good manner, but instead, he made a bad name for himself. I felt Jimmy Swaggart speech was more effective than Bill Clinton’s because Jimmy truly went deep in voice and made you truly want to forgive him. Forgiveness is what both these men wanted, so they didn’t have to see hatred in faces and mean slurred words spoke to them.
As you can see, Jimmy Swaggart and Bill Clinton wrote speeches wanting forgiveness for having an affair. These men should have learned a life lesson by this, “Every Cloud has Silver Lining.” Their lucky to still be recognized for the good things they did do. Forgiveness has a true meaning to it and if you truly want you work hard and don’t screw up next time. Do you feel like these men created a problem that impacted our nation and they just want forgiveness? Maybe, so. Are do you feel they just want to be noticed? Probably. Whatever you may think, forgiveness is what these men feel like they deserve and want to better themselves as individuals. What do you think?
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