Can you help me

Question

I read your post on Pyne and culturism. I don't think I am qualified to critique your paper the way it should be critiqued. Some general suggestions are as follows:
Start sentences with capital letters.
Watch the spelling.
You have a number of sentences that are not sentences; i.e., they are sentence fragments.
Watch the "for example" phrase. I think that is used too often.

One of the English profs can do this much more professionally than I can do it.