delete "her"
Make two sentences in place of that too-long first sentence.
Make two (or three?) sentences in place of that too-long last sentence.
Can someone proofread my English paragraph for grammar? I'd really appreciate it. Give me advice/tips on how to make it better
Shortly after her moving to the Wisconsin, Molly began attending Second Baptist Church, where during service one day, she said she was approached by a longtime parishioner named Cynthia Givens. Molly said that Cynthia, who was aware of her unstable living condition, advised her to seek help from Wisconsin Housing Authority, a nonprofit agency that provides affordable housing to homeless people and low-income working families, whom Cynthia cleans for.
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Is this better Writeacher?
Shortly after moving to the Wisconsin, Molly began attending Second Baptist Church. During service one day, she said she was approached by a longtime parishioner named Cynthia Givens, who was aware of Molly's unstable living condition. Cynthia advised her to seek help from Wisconsin Housing Authority, a nonprofit agency that provides affordable housing to homeless people and low-income working families, whom Cynthia cleans for.
Shortly after moving to the Wisconsin, Molly began attending Second Baptist Church. During service one day, she said she was approached by a longtime parishioner named Cynthia Givens, who was aware of Molly's unstable living condition. Cynthia advised her to seek help from Wisconsin Housing Authority, a nonprofit agency that provides affordable housing to homeless people and low-income working families, whom Cynthia cleans for.
"to the Wisconsin" <~~??
... for whom Cynthia cleans.
... for whom Cynthia cleans.
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