Background
Your favorite cousin has moved to your town and is looking for a job.
Her previous experiences are working as a cashier and sales clerk at two
department stores. You know she plans to apply at similar stores in your
town. But you also know she is a perfect match for a job opening as a
reliable assistant to your boss. You know she has the skills, though she
doesn’t think she is as capable as she is, and you’re sure she’d be good
at this job.
Your goal is to persuade your cousin to apply for the job. You email her
a paragraph explaining the specifics of the job and the reasons she
should apply. You want to convince her that she has the job skills
required. You’ll use an informal tone, of course, but will take care to use
correct business writing to show her that you take your recommendation
seriously.
Process
1. Using your imagination, create the kind of skills the job as boss’s
assistant requires. Make up names for your boss and the company,
as well as any facts that might help you prove your case to your
cousin. Freewrite about the skills you’ve seen her show in other
settings and about how you can convince her to use those abilities
in this position. In addition, consider personality traits that show
she would work well with your boss. Also make up details and figures
about how this job will benefit your cousin personally and
professionally.
2. Circle the information your cousin most needs to hear to be persuaded
to apply for this job. You won’t be able to use everything
you made up. Organize the details and explanation using an order
of importance pattern.
3. Open the Word document containing your draft of Paragraph 1 and
begin a new page. Type the heading Paragraph 2 and draft your
8–12 sentence paragraph. Begin with the topic sentence, in which
you establish your confidence in your cousin and spark her interest
in applying for this job. Develop your paragraph using clear, varied
sentences and concrete words with transitions or connectives that
create a logical flow. Use the information you’ve identified as most
important and make your paragraph as persuasive as possible.
I WROTE :
Paragraph 2
Cynthia, I am so happy you finally moved back to Athens. I spoke to your mom the other day, she told me you were looking for a job; I know you recently worked as a cashier and a sales clerk. Therefore, I have a very special offer for you. To begin with, I work at The Divani Caravel Hotel Athens. With that being said, my boss Mr. Guiseppe is looking for an assistant. He needs someone: who is computer literate, has strong interpersonal skills, loves to travel, and is optimist. For this reason, I thought of you right away; you are the perfect match. Your job mainly consists to enter computer data, organize and attend meetings, spread positivity among your co-workers, and interact with new people every day. Moreover, as soon as you start working, you get full insurance coverage with 2 week of paid vacation and you will earn around $60,000 annually. In addition to these work benefits, you will also get the opportunity to travel around the world for business purposes; one advantage is that at the same time you fulfill your dream which is a personal benefit. Furthermore, professionally you gain a lot of experience; new doors of opportunities open up for your future. This is a one in a lifetime opportunity, don’t miss it. It is different from your previous work experiences but I am confident that no one can do it better than you. Send out your application as soon as possible and I will put in a good word to Mr. Guiseppe. Hope to start working with you soon.
If i have any faults could you tell me the sentence and give examples. I am visual and it's a bit hard for me to understand without any specific examples.
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