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Question

Read the story “Bailey’s Escape” below.

Rewrite the story and add in the types of sensory and figurative language listed below. You should have two examples of imagery and one example each of simile, metaphor, personification, hyperbole, onomatopoeia, and oxymoron. (16 total points)

Use the list below as a checklist to make sure you have added each requirement. If you get stuck, use the Sensory Word List and the Figurative Language List for help.

TWO examples of Imagery- Use description to add sensory language that appeals to your readers’ senses of sight, sound, smell, touch, or taste. Use at least TWO of the five senses. (4 points)
Simile- add a comparison that uses “like” or “as” (2 points)
Metaphor- add a direct comparison that says one thing is another thing (2 points)
Personification- add a phrase where you give human traits to something that is not human (2 points)
Hyperbole- add an exaggeration (2 points)
Onomatopoeia- add a word that represents a sound (2 points)
Oxymoron- add a phrase made of two or more words that actually have opposite meanings (2 points)
Highlight each phrase or sentence that you added with the appropriate color and add a label with the type of sensory or figurative language used. (See the example below.)

Example: (Your re-written story should look like this.)

Kayla gasped for air as her heart pounded out of her chest. (Personification) She knew if she stopped now, she may not see Bailey again for a million years.(Hyperbole) The little dog had leaped over the fence when
the fireworks started and took off like a shot (Simile) down the street. He obviously did not care for the beautiful red, blue, and green streaks that lit up the inky black night. (Imagery)

Read the story below.

“Bailey’s Escape”

Kayla gasped for air. She knew if she stopped now, she may not see Bailey again. The little dog had leaped over the fence when the fireworks started and took off down the street. He obviously did not care for the fireworks.

Kayla turned the corner onto Applegate Avenue when she heard a sound. Kayla stood still, listening for Bailey. Sure enough, she heard a few small yips coming from the Jackson’s open garage. Kayla walked toward the Jackson’s house. A moment later, Mrs. Jackson met Kayla on the front walk holding Bailey.

“Thank you so much,” said Kayla. “I’ve been chasing him!”

“Well, I don’t blame him for running,” Mrs. Jackson replied, handing the dog back to Kayla. “Those loud sounds have been getting on my nerves too.”

Kayla walked home holding Bailey to keep him from squirming away. Once they were back inside the safety of their house, Kayla put Bailey in his dog bed and he settled down.

Rewrite the story to add sensory and figurative language as directed in the instructions above. Remember to highlight and label each phrase or sentence that you add.

Answer 1

"Bailey’s Escape" Rewritten with Sensory and Figurative Language

Kayla gasped for air as her heart pounded like a drum (Simile). Sweat trickled down her brow, stinging her eyes with salt (Imagery - Touch). She knew if she stopped now, she may not see Bailey again. The little dog had leaped over the fence when the fireworks started and took off down the street. He obviously did not care for the explosive crackles and flashes of light that painted the sky in vibrant hues of red and gold (Imagery - Sight).

Kayla turned the corner onto Applegate Avenue when she heard a sound. The echo of her footsteps danced against the pavement, creating a symphony of solitude (Personification). Kayla stood still, listening for Bailey. Sure enough, she heard a few small yips coming from the Jackson’s open garage. “Yip! Yip!” echoed Bailey’s desperate cries (Onomatopoeia). Kayla walked toward the Jackson’s house. A moment later, Mrs. Jackson met Kayla on the front walk holding Bailey.

“Thank you so much,” said Kayla. “I’ve been chasing him for an eternity” (Hyperbole)!

“Well, I don’t blame him for running,” Mrs. Jackson replied, handing the dog back to Kayla. “Those loud sounds have been getting on my nerves too.”

Kayla walked home holding Bailey to keep him from squirming away. The little dog, a bundle of wiggly energy, was a living contradiction (Oxymoron), as if he were both a fierce lion and a timid mouse. Once they were back inside the safety of their house, Kayla put Bailey in his dog bed, and he sank into slumber, breathing softly like a gentle breeze (Metaphor), settling down at last.