An outside force may invade the character and then force the evil out again. The vampire attacks the victim, but then the victim becomes a vampire and attacks others.

Which of the following is the most effective way to paraphrase these sentences?

Responses

The first thing is, an outside force gets into the character. The next thing is, the force leaves the character. Finally, the vampire attacks the character and becomes the vampire.
The first thing is, an outside force gets into the character. The next thing is, the force leaves the character. Finally, the vampire attacks the character and becomes the vampire.

A force outside the character enters, pushing out the evil. The victim is attacked by the vampire, resulting in the victim changing into a vampire and seeking other victims.
A force outside the character enters, pushing out the evil. The victim is attacked by the vampire, resulting in the victim changing into a vampire and seeking other victims.

An outside force invades the character, to force the evil out again. After the vampire attacks the victim, the victim becomes a vampire and attacks others.
An outside force invades the character, to force the evil out again. After the vampire attacks the victim, the victim becomes a vampire and attacks others.

In the beginning scene, the force outside gets the evil to come out of the vampire, followed by the victim being attacked and becoming the attacker.
In the beginning scene, the force outside gets the evil to come out of the vampire, followed by the victim being attacked and becoming the attacker.

1 answer

The most effective way to paraphrase the given sentences is:

A force outside the character enters, pushing out the evil. The victim is attacked by the vampire, resulting in the victim changing into a vampire and seeking other victims.

This version retains the original meaning while providing clarity and succinctness.