A student is writing a narrative about apple picking in the fall for class. The student wants to revise the text below.

Question

(1) The warm breeze felt soothing up against Byron's face as he walked down the dirt path. (2) Apple picking time was always his favorite time of year. (3) He just couldn't get over the amazing sights that nature offered during this time of year. (4) The oak trees had leaves full of autumn colors. (5) The small pebbles crackled under his boots as he meandered down the path towards the small stream. (6) Since he had been picking apples all day, Byron was ready to dip his feet into the water and eat raspberries he had been collecting in his pockets. (7) It was time for the best part of the day.
Which revision would BEST add vivid details to the description of the setting in the text?
A.
Change "warm breeze" to "temperate breeze" (sentence 1) and "his favorite time of year" to "his most enjoyable time of year" (sentence 2).
B.
Change "couldn't get over the amazing sights" to "was stunned by the sights" (sentence 3) and "The oak trees had leaves full of autumn colors" to "The autumn colors filled the oak trees" (sentence 4).
C.
Change "had leaves full of autumn colors" to "radiated a rainbow of leaves full of autumn colors" (sentence 4) "water and eat raspberries" to "refreshing water and snack on the juicy raspberries" (sentence 6).
D.
Change "as he meandered down the path towards the small stream" to "as he wandered down the path in an effort to find a stream" (sentence 5) and "It was time for the best part of the day" to "It was an exciting time of the day" (sentence 7).

Answer 1

C. Change "had leaves full of autumn colors" to "radiated a rainbow of leaves full of autumn colors" (sentence 4) and "water and eat raspberries" to "refreshing water and snack on the juicy raspberries" (sentence 6).

This option adds vivid imagery and sensory details that enhance the description of the setting and the experience Byron is having. The phrase "radiated a rainbow of leaves" creates a more vibrant visual, while "refreshing water" and "juicy raspberries" appeal to the senses and make the scene more inviting.