Without knowing the previous written material, we do not know what the film is or who "Srebrenica women" are. I hope this is clearly indicated in the previous paragraphs.
The importance of 9/11 attacks in the film is that it compares a national crisis to another. When the 9/11 attacks came about, the whole world stood still. Even the Srebrenica women in the film were stunned to hear what was taking place in such powerful nation like the U.S. (SPELL OUT.) Yet no one knew or gave their attention to their (UNCLEAR REFERENT.) national crisis. Their husbands were invisible to the wolrd (SP) as they were. However, they sympathize with Americans, they understood their suffering, as they too had experienced immense suffering caused by terrorist attacks that took their loved ones.
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In addition, the 9/11 attacks lets the lets the audience view the situation from a different perspective, (NEW SENTENCE, SEMICOLON OR CONJUNCTION NEEDED.)no one is immune from such attacks, and even a powerful government as the U.S. can fail to protect their (WHOSE? UNCLEAR REFERENT. "THEIR" IS PLURAL, WHILE "GOVERNMENT" IS SINGULAR.) nation.
In the future, if nobody is available to proofread your work, you can do this yourself. After writing your material, put it aside for a day — at least several hours. (This breaks mental sets you might have that keep you from noticing problems.) Then read it aloud as if you were reading someone else's work. (Reading aloud slows down your reading, so you are less likely to skip over problems.)
If your reading goes smoothly, that is fine. However, wherever you "stumble" in your reading, other persons are likely to have a problem in reading your material. Those "stumbles" indicate areas that need revising.
Once you have made your revisions, repeat the process above. Good papers often require many drafts.
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The importance of 9/11 attacks in the film is that it compares a national crisis to another. When the 9/11 attacks came about, the whole world stood still. Even the Srebrenica women in the film were stunned to hear what was taking place in such powerful nation like the U.S. Yet no one knew or gave their attention to their national crisis. Their husbands were invisible to the wolrd as they were. However, they sympathize with Americans, they understood their suffering, as they too had experienced immense suffering caused by terrorist attacks that took their loved ones.
In addition, the 9/11 attacks lets the lets the audience view the situation from a different perspective, no one is immune from such attacks, and even a powerful government as the U.S. can fail to protect their nation.
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