Here's what I'd put:
Your reservations are confirmed to cater your office party for Administrative Professionals' Day on April 20. We appreciate City Councilman Bob Hopkins' recommending our catering service to you.
We will serve the 225 office professionals at noon in the Roosevelt Dining Room, located on the third floor of the Russell Building. The cost will be $10.50 per serving for the Japanese buffet.
(1) should there be a comma before and after Bob Hopkins and per serving (2) Is Administrative Professionals Day capitalized (3)Any numbers corrections or any other punctuation mistakes THANKS!!!!!
Your reservations are confirmed to cater your office party for Administrative Professionals Day on April 20. We appreciate City Councilman Bob Hopkins recommending our catering service to you.
We will serve the 225 office professionals at noon in the Roosevelt Dining Room located on the third floor of the Russell Building. The cost will be $10.50 per serving for the Japanese buffet.
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I added 2 apostrophes and 1 comma. Do you see why?