Well, it's kind of gung-ho, but not an unpleasant read.
The change of font after the first paragraph is a bit unexpected, and a little proofreading would go a long way to eliminate the typos, spelling and grammar errors, and some awkward wording.
As blogs go, it's not bad, but I'd never submit it for an essay.
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2 answers
I agree with Anonymous above.
The last two sentences are rather strange:
There isn’t one thing that we do on a normal basis that does not involve using technology (except when sleeping). I disagree. I can go into my back yard and read a book or sketch a scene ... neither of which involves anything electronic. There are plenty of other things people can do (and actually do) that don't involve technology. One thing to be careful of when you're writing is to avoid sweeping generalizations like this sentence.
Overall, technology is the foundation of the future and it serves as a prominent source in modernization. If humans cannot read and think, then all the technology in the world won't help. Knowing how to read, comprehend, and think will always come first.
The last two sentences are rather strange:
There isn’t one thing that we do on a normal basis that does not involve using technology (except when sleeping). I disagree. I can go into my back yard and read a book or sketch a scene ... neither of which involves anything electronic. There are plenty of other things people can do (and actually do) that don't involve technology. One thing to be careful of when you're writing is to avoid sweeping generalizations like this sentence.
Overall, technology is the foundation of the future and it serves as a prominent source in modernization. If humans cannot read and think, then all the technology in the world won't help. Knowing how to read, comprehend, and think will always come first.