Asked by Curiousity killed the cat

I have this poem that I was working on and I used the word "derived" and from my understanding it means to obtain. So i was wondering if this sentence made sense with the word.

"No more will I let you fill my head with stories you've in-bedded, that rest here until my brain has derived."

Please and Thank you(':
Answered by Writeacher
No ... and there's no such word as "in-bedded" either.

http://www.answers.com/topic/derive
Answered by Curiousity killed the cat
sorry i meant embedded
Answered by Writeacher
"fill my head" and "embedded" mean about the same thing here. What's another verb that would ADD MEANING to the sentence instead of repeating what is already there?
Answered by Curiousity killed the cat
formulated could replace embedded?
I'm not too sure.
but could that work? or would it still not make sense?
Answered by Writeacher
I'd use "spun" -- do you see why?
Answered by Curiousity killed the cat
No, not at all.
I kind of liked the word formulated better.
But anyway, may you explain?
Answered by Writeacher
"stories you've spun" = alliteration

Also it just sounds better ... not such harsh sounds as in "formulated" ... t's and d's are hard sounds.
Answered by Curiousity killed the cat
...I guess so !
Thank you for your help and constructive criticism.
It was well appreciate(:
Answered by Writeacher
You're welcome. =)
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